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Ransom
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Phoenix764 on 09/07/05
This is definitely one of the worst stories ever told.  All Amy had to do was give him love, and he would have stayed with her.  He would have abandoned his father without a doubt.  Why didn't she offer him the chance?  What his mother did is unconciousable.  She intentionally destroyed her son, and any chance her son having children for revenge against the father.  If it happened in real life, I would hope that she got a life long prison sentence, since giving her a hystorectomy without anesthia or drawing and quartering are not options.
Sorry Jennifer, but this story has no redeeming qualities to even justify one word of it being written.

Comment by Trebor 54 on 01/30/04
 This story was one of the worst I've read on this site. I hope the father comes arround and gets even his whore of an ex wife!!!! Using the son as a means for revenge is totally stupid and wifey should be punished because of it.

Comment by tanyalynn on 01/30/04
I did love the story, even if the psychology was a little flawed.  for those of us who wish we were girls, this would be an ideal situation.

Comment by Angel O'Hare on 01/30/04
This time I must disagree with Jezzi. :(

There is no justification to use your own son as a pawn in a game. You call that love? Revenge is a personal thing between you and one other. Revenge using another person is just wrong. That would justify a drunk driver kills your son, the drunk driver has a son so you kill his son. Why? What did his son ever do to yours? Nothing!

To use an innocent person as a way of revenge toward another is just wrong, period!

It was a very good story though! Fiction is so free and different that you can do almost anything.

This boy needs facial plastic surgery now and because of the drugs he was given blatantly under false pretenses he has no chance as a life as a male. His male organs removed and the painful process of continuous use of dilators is his future.

Money, it came down to money as well hasn't it? This story teaches that all is fair in revenge. Lie after lie is alright if you are getting revenge. The life this child will lead as a teen will forever be changed and he has no clue as to gender relationships! I guess since his mother is now a lesbian by choice (different than by birth) this young he/she will be a lesbian as well. It sure did not sound as if the boy had gay tendencies.

So, from straight boy just getting into his own and just two so years away from being financially independent is now what?

No Jezzi, there is no justification for what happened to this child.
Giggle, giggle.

Jennifer, this was a very well written story and I enjoyed it as a story. Jezzi and I go a few years back and we have always had this philosophical debate on love and hate, the differences between the two, justified and unjustified actions, the use of deceit for both good and bad intentions. We will always have our differences and I love her to death for them! Giggle, giggle.

You keep writing girl, you got the gift. Huggles
Angel

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 01/29/04
I usually dislike mind control stories, and Amy and Lynn certainly messed with Anthony's mind and did it for revenge.  However it was also clear that they loved the new Anthony and lavished Jessica  with love and affection.  It didn't seem like just an act.  If he had been getting love and affection from his dad, he wouldn't have fallen for their "he hates you" story.  So, all in all, I see this as a happy and just ending.



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