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A Real Girl For a Night
by Danielle Jones

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Comment by ashley on 09/10/10
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, nice one

Comment by Leslie on 06/17/04
Good story...sexy.  A fantasy for me.
I was a little disturbed by the criticism.  Disapproving of run-on sentences..come on.  How about Joyce and Faulkner.
I've been a writer, and a crossdresser, all of my life.  Except, in the beginning, when I was an English teacher.

Comment by Sheryl S. on 12/17/03
Pretty much agree with Pervy on all counts.  Quite enjoyable romp, fascinating people, lively scenario -- just in need of some technical sprucing up and editing.  Keep it up -- it takes practice, but the story itself is interesting, credible, internally consistent, and fun, and that's what is truly important.

Love & Huggs, Sheryl S.

Comment by Pervette on 12/16/03
A delightful romp, lots of depraved goings on, great fun for all.
But, oh!...those run-on sentences!  They make it hard to follow the
story at times.  You really need an editor.  A story as good as
this is deserves one.

Pervy



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