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A Relationship Killer
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Comment by Leslie on 12/29/12
I very much enjoyed the writing style as well as the story line. I did, however, notice just a few grammar problems, or word usage issues. Comment by Robin on 05/06/06 I have to agree with the previous critiques on grammar and paragraph structure, however, I did read the story all the way through and found it to be great! Your imagination and characters have great potential! I hope that you continue to write great stories like this in the future and look forward to seeing you fully develop your writing style :) Comment by Andrea Foster on 07/06/05 I'm very sorry, but these tremendously long unstructured paragraphs, with dialogue and description all muddled together, are so hard to read that I'm afraid I gave up half way through. I'm sure there's a good story lurking there, and I'm missing out on it, but... Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/05/05 Danielle, I know it seems all I do is find fault with your stories, but I do find them interesting and enjoyable enough to read them through and think your work has great potential. I mean my comments as constructive criticism. I do think you could use the help of a good proofreader and editor. Comment by Maggie on 07/04/05 I'm sure that this story really wonderful, however please learn more of the rules of grammar, especially those regarding paragraphs. These little beauties are not just something that our 3rd grade teachers made us create, they serve a wonderful purpose. A paragraph, at its most basic function, makes a writing more readable to the eye. I gives a page rhythm as it gives the mind a way to package a thought or an event. It packages those things in a way that the human mind packages them and makes a work far more accessible. |
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