Molly and Sara, both have big mouth. They didn't need talk to people about Suzie and Rhonda be their father and brother.
Molly and Sara should be punished.
Good story.

i wish they would just enjoy i did !

I liked your story but it was a pity it wasn't complete.

A great story, please write more.

WHERE IS PART 4

a nice sweet story of understanding i will need to reread before i make further comments well done

Hey I want some more of this story pretty please!I think you did a wonderful job please finish it Pretty Please.  I really hate it when I can't finish a story that I start reading and really enjoy.  This one falls into that area Please Please Please finish it.  I know it may seem annoying to have some one begging but this truly was a good story!

Dear Rhonda:

  This story is really shaping up. I guess it isn't really a tale but a modified diary of your life. I have no complaints with how part three turned out.  There is a lot of fun here and joy too. This story is a treat and I am just loving it. The relationships between the sisters especially Renee' and Rhonda move the story along at a brisk pace as they just can't wait to continue to get to know their new sister/twin.
 
  Thank you and please keep up the good work.

Hugs,

Kristi

This latest part is great. well done and can't wait for the next.

i wonder what the future holds for suzie and her little girl rhonda? this seems to be a nice normal family. i'm looking forword to the next part of this story.

So, Rhonda really did have a Dad that was transitioning to female and had C size breasts that he was able to hide from his children?  I thought maybe this was made up as it seemed kind of strange when I read it.  I thought that it distracted from the story line but it is used often in stories posted to Crystal's.  "Oh, didn't you know that your Dad is a cross dresser too, as well as your Uncle Billy and Cousin Tom and Grandfather Larry and every other male member of your family."  But from your comment below you seem to say that this is a true story.

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Comment by Rhonda on 01/26/04

Sorry, this is the only way I know (so far) TO REPLY TO A COMMENT) kind of aimed at Annie-o.  Please note the name of the character and the name of the author.  While Rhonda exists full time as Rhonda, she has no repeat NO desire to wed a handsome (or other) man.  If you made this assumption based on something in the story please let me know and I will edit it.  Rhonda was married to a genetic female for 32 years before MS parted them, and raised two daughters, 1 female and 1 male.  This story is only slightly fictional, in that Rhonda's mother is a pit bull and is a lot more blunt than storytelling allows, and my sisters' names have been changed to protect the innocent.

This is a good to very good story but the second part needs the paragraph format revised like the first part already has. The plot line is decent and the grammar and spelling are good. The drawback is the paragraph division being lacking. It makes it harder to read.

Rhonda, dear:

I loved part 1 as I previously wrote, but I must say this is light years better!! Wow and double wow!

I agree whole heartedly with Angel's comments both about the story and about commentors posting e-mail addresses.

Cassandra

GREAT IMPROVEMENT RHONDA!!!!

Now this is more like it! In this rewrite you have shown your ability and that you want to do better. I am proud of you and am really looking forward to what comes next!

Another fine author who will only get better with each posting!

Huggles
Angel

PS. If the posters name is in blue you can click on it and send them a personal e-mail, if it isn't well you are stuck answering them here in the comments section. To bad more people don't add their e-mail addresses. It makes things so much better for us authors to answer them and thank them for commenting.

GREAT STORY I love stories about PRE TEENS & HAIR!!!!!!!!

Where could I go to read RONDA'S DAY?

Sorry, this is the only way I know (so far) TO REPLY TO A COMMENT)
kind of aimed at Annie-o.  Please note the name of the character and the name of the author.  While Rhonda exists full time as Rhonda, she has no repeat NO desire to wed a handsome (or other) man.  If you made this assumption based on something in the story please let me know and I will edit it.  Rhonda was married to a genetic female for 32 years before MS parted them, and raised two daughters, 1 female and 1 male.  This story is only slightly fictional, in that Rhonda's mother is a pit bull and is a lot more blunt than storytelling allows, and my sisters' names have been changed to protect the innocent.

I loved the story, and hopefully it will grow into a long transition to college and beyond! Keep up the great writings.
Vicki

good start - when do we get more?

First, identical twins have to be the same gender. It's a fertilized egg that splits that creates the twins.
 Second, why is it that so many writers assume that because a boy wears female clothing, it means he wants to be a girl full-time, and eventually marry a handsome man.

What a wonderful first part. I enjoyed it very much.
Can't for the next part.

Just loved this it s great keep on with the writing your just great.

Hey a fun one for a change!!!!

Love it so far.  The poor boy is being overwhelmed with what he wants, and is not overly ashamed is happening.  Perhaps it is the acceptance of everyone that knew without his knowing.

Keep it up, but clean up your techincal writing.  New paragraphs as you switch speakers.  Spell check and grammer check, please...

I loved this one as I love Your other stories too!

Having being wearing different girls and women's "underthings" (not to mention diapers) it was wonderful to relate to! Such a loving and understanding family - well one can always dream...

Hugs from Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)

Ps. can identical twins be of different gender - well it really doesn't matter a hoot!

Rhonda, this is another good story, but really now you couldn't find an editor? You couldn't proof your own story? I mean just read it through after you have written it and you would pick up and correct those annoying little errors.

You have had time and have written enough to know better by now. We do expect writers to get better in more than style. I do love the gist of your stories and I do love your characters, what I don't like, is trying to add words or finish sentences to make your story readable. I am not talking about grammar here, I am talking about just taking your time writing and then proofing your own work before you submit it for posting.

Can I recommend a site that does this for you? They at least read through your story and proof it before they post it on their site. The name of the site is called "The Big Closet"  Erin the web mistress and others mostly Aardvark look over the stories and fix glaring mistakes and offer you advice on how to write a better story with fewer mistakes. They also help by putting paragraphs where you neglected to make one or two or three. Giggle, giggle.

How do I know this? Hey, I was a newbie once and I had to learn bunches and I am still learning bunches!

This story can be a very good story if you don't rush through it and submit it as is. If I didn't like your style I wouldn't even comment, but I do like it and really want you to improve yourself.

Huggles
Angel

Hello Rhonda:

  Wow, this one is moving very fast! I did enjoy the emotion and sense of fun very much.  Interesting touch to have the boy oblivious he is showing off women's underthings without knowing it.  Please slow down and give us more delicious details, if possible.  The rushed pace, though, does truly convey just how excited the girls and Mom are to complete this transformation. Three sisters to go to work on him, wow!

  Honey, please watch stuff like the term identical twins.  They are always the same sex and look just alike. You mean fraternal. And then they can pretend to be identical twins. To many of us readers are familiar with actual identical twins and the biology of it as well.

   I love your enthusiasm and your writing style is fairly crisp as well.  For a sweet read that I so often go for, I highly recommend Rhonda's story.

   Hugs,

   Kristi