Fil9wc Very informative post.Really thank you! Want more.

82AJeX Enjoyed every bit of your post.Really looking forward to read more. Want more.

its an intresting story and reads well

i always wished that would happen to me   great story

Ok, you wrote. Complete: YES!
So, where is the end of the story?
I'm waiting!!!!!!
Hugs.
Silvia.

this is a great start to this story part one was very good well written when we we have part2 please well done a simple mistake by carol or was it his mothers purpose all along time will tell in the next part

well dear lisa di.
This is one great story you made and i realy think that the starcutre wich you used was fasenating and realy ongoing with the story.
i just wonder  when(and if) will you put the next part of the story here because i am realy looking frowred to it.

keep on the good work;
Eran.

a good story needs some more thinking about and i would like to read about his reaction and his decision i feel it would have been better if he was punished  for fighting as well as his suspension from school
otherwise a good story i look forward to reading the next part

Tammy? Who is Tammy? Part 2? Well, how about a re-write from the beginning? Great draft of a story that could be fantastic! Needs more background of the characters, especially the problems with dad and mom. The sister needs to be defined more with maybe a bit more brother sister episodes. There should be special attention given to the background of Richard. Like emphasis on how dad made his behavior rather macho. His school days could be better defined with added interactions with his peers and teachers. (poor grades and all) Gym is always a great place to define his less than manly state. Interactions with girls and their interaction with him before his fight. The fight was a great way to start a transformation! Fantastic idea there! Hope to see this story blossom again and turn out to be a great series!

I loved the story I would just like to know how someone who has their jaw wired shut can speak. I also think that he must have enjoyed the transformation or else he would have said something. I hope you continue with this story. Please no sex though as the character is only twelve and I think that is sick when people depict young kids in sexual situations.

i loved the story. I would like to see it continue a little to show what happens now that Richard has been transformed. Some teasing by his sister and maybe being made to stay that way for a few days.  His fear of his freinds finding out.  He may secretly enjoy being a girl, but he wouldn't want anyone to know

The story has a fine start but needs some work. It needs more background on the family. It needs polishing and refining, maybe help from a proofreader or editor. The plot is good so far and I hope it doesn't get degraded by sex or forced dating. The biggest detractions were the slip ups on the names and the misspelled or incorrect words.

Dear Lisa,

  I really liked this story and the way it's structured.  I loved the salon scene.  I wonder, though, why he didn't tell Carol he was Richard?  You have him point to his jaw as if to say, "I can't talk.", and then he talks away throughout the session.  Saying he was Richard would have avoided all the misunderstanding, and it's really to early for him to want to be a girl.  

  I think he should fight the transformation more; maybe when he wants to play baseball and mom says he has to learn to sew instead or something.  I would also urge you to avoid any sex with boys scenes.  Can't wait for the next installment.

Jezzi

Dear Lisa Di

The story is going wonderfully but.....  There are always a few buts aren't there?  There are a few places especially in the beginning where you seemed to have left out words.  It jumps a bit from place to place without connecting why things are happening.  For example:  Why is the father and mother splitting up in the first two paragraphs or so?  The man and boy go a game and suddenly there is a fight and daddy is leaving.  There must have been a long period of problems before this.  A few words are not spelled properly.  All in all, it is the type of story I love and a great start.  Give a little more time with details if you will.  It makes the story flow better and is easier to follow.  

Thanks for a great start,

Sharonn