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Comment by mia pron khalifa on 12/21/18
QC5bLM I really liked your post.Really looking forward to read more. Comment by mia pron khalifa on 12/21/18 IaQS48 say it. You make it entertaining and you still care for to keep it smart. Comment by Jim Karner on 04/25/15 Basically a good story spoilt by discontinuity and lousy spelling making reading difficult at times. Needs revision and professional editing. Comment by robbie on 10/19/14 well done enjoyed it peace R Comment by smashing top seo on 10/24/13 D9qSG2 Thank you ever so for you article post.Really looking forward to read more. Fantastic. Comment by Silvia. on 10/13/11 Good story. Comment by lynne on 06/05/10 Sounds like there is some experience involved here with the healing stage ... good story .. I thing it is biographgraphical Comment by john panty on 05/29/09 I have enjoyed this story very much .. wish you would add some more chapters and keep it going thank you John Comment by Gillian Ogilvie on 10/02/08 Dear Rone, Comment by Yoron on 06/06/08 Yes, you definitely need a editor. Comment by Antonia on 07/15/07 Please, PLease, PLEase, PLEAse, PLEASe, PLEASE find an EDITOR. It could have been, and still could be, SO MUCH FUN doing it for you. Comment by jennifer on 06/06/07 i just wanted to say that i loved your story and that i hope you will maybe add to this story some more in the future, i could'nt stop reading , you have a gift for writing these kind of stories, i just want to say thanks and keep up the good work Comment by harry reimers on 06/02/07 keep going you have left me sitting here wontting more and if any one has any thing to say that is not about the story but to pick on the spelling keep them to your self it is not esey macking a story for us to read Comment by rone welles on 05/31/07 I want to thank you all for the comments .... I have MS and I travel to a clinic and while there I read stories to the kids that cannot travel without a wheelchair or other conveyince I only have one hand and that is shakey so I trip on the keys and nake bistakes Comment by BB on 05/31/07 Does anyone else think it is funny that someone suggesting an editor and a spell check would themselves have misspelled words and poor grammer in their critique? Comment by Sammy Jayne on 05/30/07 Please, Please, Please go and read a book. Any Book with narrative will do and see how dialogue is written( Dickens is an excellent example). The idea behing this story is ok but it takes an awful lot of effort to read. Comment by Juliette Lima on 05/29/07 I could not FORCE myself past: Comment by Dayna on 05/29/07 *sigh* I always hesitate before a critique. Comment by hippie cheerleader on 05/28/07 Dear Rone: I do hope Ronda gets to go back that school and participate in the cheer squad! Comment by John panty on 05/15/07 Well what is next ? we cant stop here .. Comment by Salty on 12/27/06 I really like your story. But you are like me with some stupid fingers(typo's). But please keep writing. Comment by Nist on 08/09/06 I was bored so i read this. Story was ok, could have done with a little more plot and character development, but otherwise was alright for what it is. The biggest problem for me was the written english aspects. granted, i'm not an expert by any shake of a stick, however i do think spending some time to learn correct gramma usage would help in your story telling no end. Comment by Chrsisti on 08/08/06 My dearest Rone I must thank you for this heart wrenching ,sweet ,kind, cute,love story ,,even though I cryed at poor Ronda's pain and suffering .Ronda has so many who have nothing but pure love to give her . Her (twin Patty ha ha ) her two older sister to love and help her . her cousin Amy pure of soul who will also help her be all the girl she can be . then we have Sue who would kill those who would harm her princess( a love interest maybe ?) Debbie who will try to help Ronda get back to be the cheerleader she should be?and Ronda's knight in shinning armour Jason (her hero,knight,friend,lover ? )Does Ronda love girls ? I hope so. With the help of hormone therapy will she perfer men ? or will she take one of each a husban and a wife ?? Please keep the story going and finish it Comment by Jenny on 08/07/06 I liked your story. Family sticking together, there will be sad times and good times, but they will be making the journey together and that's what counts. Please continue to write about her further adventures. Maybe, she would be able to use growth hormones to increase her height to five feet. Comment by DeeDee Clark on 08/07/06 FUNNY!! CUTE!! SAD!! This is very often true about people who don't understand that others are different. I really really liked the story. My hats off to the author, and the $64.00 dollar question is--- WILL THERE BE ANY MORE? Comment by Jeanne on 08/06/06 I'm not going to be critical of your work like the others. This is an "at a gril". Very good. Don't stop now keep going and the sharp tongs will stop. Huggels and kisses. Comment by (AJ) Eric on 08/05/06 Not sure what to think of this. Most of part one -- Ron's ability as a mechanic, the gospel singing, Jason's job as bodyguard (his part four cameo notwithstanding), the cheerleading, college-level math, just about everything else -- gets thrown out the figurative window in part two when someone named Doug, who didn't even appear in the story before then, decides to murder the kid and apparently damage nearly every bone and organ in Ron's already-defective body in the process. Comment by Chris W on 08/04/06 This is a good story, I like the concept and the delivery is done fairly well. "BUT" Someone, please edit it. Comment by john on 07/25/06 this is fun to read try another chapter please... Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/02/06 The big problem is Ron's never going to be any bigger. Being a girl will help in the immediate future, but in long term 4'2" will be a problem no matter whether a boy or a girl. I like the mechanic part. |
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