1YdoxU It is the best time to make a few plans for the future and it as

q6iz2f Very informative post. Really Cool.

nBPTtr Fantastic post.Really thank you! Will read on...

Jenn's email address is at reflectionofjp@yahoo.com

I know she has been thiking of starting a group so she can post the rest of her story and others that she has been working on. Her 11 year old daughter has also been giving her ideas for some of the stories too. Everyone should write her and tell her that if she does do a group that they would join and want to here the rest of this story and the others that she has too

Jenn,

It's too bad or should I say unfortunate that you let some of the critics censer you. Most of your supporters most likely failed to write anything and to be honest I think you had far more of them then detractors. I feel you might have done or faired a bit better by having someone proof your writing before submitting it but you were telling such a good story that I over looked the little interrupts and was enjoying what you wrote. Now I am disappointed because it looks like I’ll never get to find out what you had planned for Micky.

JB

Did you start a Yahoo group?  If so, what is its name?

After reading much of the story (out of a morbid curiosity) and all of the comments, all I can add is a quote that 12-steppers often repeat: "Denial -- it's not a river in Egypt."

Actually, I take that back -- I can add another quote, one that I often repeat: "I wish that I could be a girl, so that I didn't have to be responsible for anything." (That in reference to "Yes I am a bitch at times, but being a GG entitles me too.")

I missed seeing how this story ends...please write more!

Ok :)
Reading the comments here i can see that I'm not the first one to take umbrage on this story.
To use and abuse children, and their faith in adults, is about the most demeaning thing I know.
In my eyes it destroys the child as well as the abuser.
No good will ever come out of it.
To call that 'need' a 'god given' right and believe that no one will react against it is actually wrong, believe it or not :)
So this story is wrong on so many points that I won't even bother with it.
And if you can't see it your self then you definitely need new glasses.

Yoron.

please more more more ,Michelle has a future and i want to know what happens to her:)....great work thankyou

Dear Jenn.
     I loved your story and I was so sorry when you stopped, but can quite understand. People like Kim think that they are so wonderful and have such a high opinion of themselves. I guess they think that they are perfect!!! I would say just plain arrogant.
     I did try to contact you many years ago when I lived in the U.S., both on this site and through Yahoo, but without any success. If by chance you do happen to read this, I would love to have an email from you.
        I do hope that you are keeping well and that all your exam results were brilliant.

Jenn,

I dont know where you went but i reaaly miss you and our conversations. Hope you finished schooland everything is ok.

Please email me if you read this letter.

Yours in panties,'

Daniella

I always felt that this was a good story but it could have more of an element of mystery.  such as Micky could have been on the run from danger and Jenn takes him under her wing and thus go on the run with him.  I was expecting that Jenn to disguise Micky as a girl to protect him.  
I myself, have a few stories on this site and I know that they are far from perfect but I like to take in all negetive comments and it makes the story better and me a better writer.

I'd just love to get to read the rest of the Runaway...can anyone tell me where I might find Part 6 and so on.  I have no intention to criticize the author or plot, but simply would like to see what happens next which, to my way of thinking, indicates a good story.  Please Jenn or anyone who knows where the conclusion of THE RUNAWAY is posted, just let me know where it is.  Thanks!!!   Kitty

Please continue this story as it is interesting

Don't worry about negative comments, just be true to yourself and write what you want to. People aren't forced to read anything.
Personally I thought it was a lovely story, and just like a fairy tale. Gentle and wonderful. I really hope you write more.
Bless you and keep on writing.

I see where you are a new and upcoming author. I read the entire story, it is not totally plausible.  Most nine year old street urchins know the difference between girls attire and boys attire. By nine they have seen it all and are hardened.  Jenn is a pedophile as much as you make it look as though she is only being manipulative to make the boy want to be a girl, she is doing it only for her self gratification. I noticed a lot ot writing errors and I noticed a lot of critiques that you felt were personal attacks. So you pulled out of this story site and are sharing your writings with sycophants. I write for this story site and I have taken some hard hitting critques.  When life deals you lemons make lemonade. We learn by mistakes, apparently you feel you are above criticism. I write better now because people took their time to tell me I had good ideas B U T I needed another set of eyes to read my stories.  I do that now. I resented them when they first clobbered me, but I grew and I wrote, my second set of eyes sees very little errors and I feel much more relaxed bringing a story to this site. I have seen critiques by people who are looking for fairy tale endings so much sugar it would choke the sugar plum fairy. I am currently working on a story where the main character dies as well as other things happen. I would suggest you suck up and buck up and get back to writing for the site, You have a lot to offer, good ideas but they need to be thought out. Rough drafts are good for writing. So stay on your own Yahoo site and deprive yourself of becoming a better writer or come back and finish your series and take the criticism as it is mean to be, a help.

Let us get of few things straight here shall we Jenn?

First, I never forced you to do anything, because I do not hold any power at this site or any other site. The worst thing I have done to you was leave a review about your story, in the review section. I made no attempt to contact Storysite to have your story removed, and quite frankly, I would have no reason to do so. Also, I never contacted Storysite about Tammy's story either; I only expressed my desire to do so with hers.

Second, I did mention positive points to your story, and this is something I gladly acknowledge. You seem hell bent on only looking at constructive criticism and lashing out at it instead of learning from those comments. Take them or leave them, nobody is forcing you to do anything.

Third, I made a review about a story that Tammy Wilson wrote and have been repeatedly attacked and called names. You were among those people, and yet, I have not resorted to the same tactics. I simply stated my opinion and that should have been the end of it, but someone had to accuse me of posting a review for your story. I decided I would read and leave a review, which is the only power I happen to have. You post a story on the net; you had better get used to the idea that someone might read it and leave a review. You as an author can not control what people may think about your story or control what they may say in public about it. The best you can do is hope that enough people do like it.

Now, you just go ahead and make your choices in terms of what to do with your story. When you posed your question about what you should do, I never said that you should go. Personally, I'd rather see you stay and develop a thicker skin, and grow as a writer. Too bad you will surround yourself with a tiny group of friends, who will never tell you the truth about what they may think about your story. They will simply say they liked it, and go only a bit further, because that is something you want to hear. Good luck with your club.

Kim.

Effective immediately, myself and several others will no longer be posting our stories to this or any other public site, unless I go and create my own. This decision has come about because of that unprovoked attack inflicted on others and myself by a self-righteous and self-appointed cyber police named Kim West, who has decided that she will monitor my stories and those of others to see if they fit her so-called standards. It seems that this individual has nothing better to do than to come to this site and launch her attacks against several of the authors here. My stories will now be restricted only to my Yahoo group where narrow-minded and hypocritical individuals such as her will not have access to them. She cloaks her attacks by saying that she is just claiming they are her opinion. What she is doing is far more than just opinion.  If anyone has objections to my decision, read her crap below and on the comments of other authors here and feel free to send her an email and let her know what you think. I don't have any more time to waste dealing with her or her crap.

Jenn

I just love your story Jenn, Please continue it as I am eagerly awaiting next chapter. I think your story offers originality and a perspective that I never thought of exploring in my own writing.
Keep up the excellent work.
Your Freind and Fan,
Tammy

Looks like the internet police are after you and Tammy. Like who are they to monitor what you say in a story or anything? They are a bunch of idiots and obviously have no life of their own and have to stick their noses into other people's business. I can see now why you haven't posted any more to your story.

Hi Jenn!

Someone accused me of giving a review to your story. I believe her name was Lisa, but that's not what is important right now. Since I am being accused of leaving you a review I find it necessary to actually post my comments about your story, and do not worry; I will be completely honest and fair with your story.


The main premise of this story hinges on Jenn wanting a little boy so she can dress him up as a girl. That may be a personal fantasy for the author, but why go through the trouble of such a thing? Why can't Jenn be happy adopting a little girl instead? I mean, unless the little girl she chooses hates wearing frilly dresses then I don't see much of a problem, but Jenn does not want to do this. She is compelled by her own selfish motives to try and find a boy, and then treat that boy like a girl.

On a purely technical note I occasionally see some errors in your writing. Here are two quick examples:

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"Well how about I but them for you. My treat for you."
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This should read more like, "Well, how about I buy them; it'll be my treat for you."

Here is another example:

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"This is in case you get hungry later. Hide it in your sock and don't tell anyone you don't have it."
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This sentence as it stands is a double negative, which basically means Jenn isn't really telling the boy to hide the money. To correct this is simple, just get rid of the second don't. Nobody is perfect when they construct sentences, and I have had more than my share when it comes to my own writing. Perhaps a second pair of eyes would help you catch mistakes.

This next sentence you write has nothing wrong with it on a technical level, but it is still hard to believe.

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With that Jenn headed off to work and he went in the other direction, not even suspecting that everything he was wearing was 100% girls clothing.
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A boy would most likely know what panties look like, but alright; let's just say he just doesn't get it. Well, the other boys who beat him up earlier will now see this poor boy in brand new clothes and will want to know why. They will also notice he is wearing girls clothing and will most likely beat him up for being gay. This is probably a more realistic scenario for Micky.

The overall plot of the story is to try to convince a boy that he wants to dress and act like a girl. If this is really his choice and is really happy about wearing a dress, then I see no problem. He isn't being physically abused, he isn't being raped, and in fact isn't being forced to do anything. These are positive points that do need to be mentioned.

The problems are, you have a boy that is on the street who desperately wants to be loved by a parent, a child that needs not only food and clothing, but a roof over his head. He also needs a proper education in order to obtain some sort of real future. So far Jenn's love is conditional; she will have Micky, but only as her daughter. This poses an interesting situation. What if Micky started becoming uncomfortable about wearing girls clothing? What would happen if Micky found out he was being manipulated all along? What would happen to the relationship? These are questions that, if answered, would make for an interesting story.  I make no recommendations one way or another about this story.


You make the following claims about your story:

1) The story is about two people who need each other.

Kim:
Micky needs someone, but the question still remains is Jenn right for him.

2) The story is about choices. The main character made a choice about, the runaway made a choice, and they both continue to make choices.

Kim:
If you were desperate for the love of a parent, would you change your lifestyle and sexual orientation? This is an all too common theme with children struggling to understand their own sexuality. It is hard enough on a child to decide this when they have parents, but it is even more so when the child is homeless.

3) The story does not contain any force at all nor will it ever. Yes there may be some trickery involved, but nothing harmful.

Kim:
So far the story is as you say, but I will be watching just the same.

4) There is no sex or anything implying sex in my story. Sex involving children is disgusting and someone should shoot those who force children into such positions.

Kim:
And yet, you defended Tammy Wilson's story recently. It had loads of children having sex with one another and with adults, but you only complained about the negative reviews it received. Yes, your story has no sex acts involving the child. If the story had, then I would have had much more to say in this regard.


You give the following recommendations to your readers:

1) I'll just posting and ignore anything the hypocrites say.

Kim:
Ignoring people who express opinions that are not what you want to hear you mean?

2) I just stop posting.

Kim:
Certainly your choice, but that would mean you are running away.

3) I create a private mailing list and only those on it, after I approve them will receive additional parts of the story.

Kim:
Can't take constructive criticism, and therefore, you must surround yourself with like minded individuals. No possibility for growth, and nobody to challenge you.

4) I create an exclusive yahoo group only for those who want the story and access to anything else I do.

Kim:
Again, an exclusive club that is ultimately stagnant with a lack of true feedback.

Jenn:
You decide and let me know. Remember the saying, hell hath no furry like Jenn when she's pissed!

Kim:
You should see me when I get royally pissed off. I am not so sweet and gentle as I am right now.

Its a wonderful story and I see much more to blossom from it.

I miss you Miss. Jenn and I hope you are thinking about me! Do drop me a line! Someone wants to see you again!!!!

Lots of Love,

Micaela

How did I miss this one? GEEZE! Wonderful start to a promising series Jennifer. Please continue with it? It has been a couple of months since you have added to this series. Maybe your next chapter(s) are in the story que?

Huggles
Angel

brilliant manipulation its so good that she helped a runaway boy even she turned himpartly into a girl brilliant story hope the next parts come through soon and how the weekend went there are many things to do with this story its great wonderfull writing more please

Dear Jenn
I love your story and can;t wait to read the next entry. I wish this story was about me, I truley feel you are right on target. Please complete this story for us, I wait and know it will have a happy ending.
All the best
Jacki  

In the paragraph immediately following point 4, the next to the last sentence in that paragraph should have read:

"I also have a few friends that are raising special girls and do understand how these special children are and what they need and want."

Jenn

This is in response to some of the recent comments I have been receiving, especially the anonymous ones from those who are too chicken to identify themselves. Some of you must be either hypocritical or really stupid. You attack my story and me and come up with things that the story in no way, shape, or form even implies, yet you keep coming back and reading it. You want acceptance by more GGs, yet when one fully accepts all of you just continue on with this BS. I have read numerous stories involving children and rape, incest, forced feminization and even sex changes, all of which are highly illegal in this country. Yet you don't do anything to them. My story involves none of these at all. In fact you are missing the entire point of things going on in my story. Since some of you are too stupid to see it, I have made a list for you:

1) The story is about two people who need each other.

2) The story is about choices. The main character made a choice about, the runaway made a choice, and they both continue to make choices.

3) The story does not contain any force at all nor will it ever. Yes there may be some trickery involved, but nothing harmful.

4) There is no sex or anything implying sex in my story. Sex involving children is disgusting and someone should shoot those who force children into such positions.

Getting the points yet? If not then you are beyond help. I happen to have an adopted daughter and would NEVER do anything to hurt her in any way. I understand what children go through and what they need. My daughter has everything she needs, and is maybe a little spoiled, but will never lack for anything because of my trust fund. I also have a few friends that are raising special sons and do understand how these special children are. So unless you know what you are talking about, BUG OFF!!!!

So here are the options for continuing on with my story here:

1) I'll just posting and ignore anything the hypocrites say.

2) I just stop posting.

3) I create a private mailing list and only those on it, after I approve them will receive additional parts of the story.

4) I create an exclusive yahoo group only for those who want the story and access to anything else I do.

You decide and let me know. Remember the saying, hell hath no furry like Jenn when she's pissed!

A wonderful story so far, I am anxious to see how your son/daughter reacts as a girl in her frillys and  dresses' Will she later go out with the boys?

Jenn,

Don't let them get you down.  This is a bit of fiction.  I know how hard it is to come up with an original idea of just how a young boy gets introduced to wearing girls clothes.  I've had similar fantasies about "rescuing" young homeless people.  However I know that in reality it isn't going to happen.  Even at Micky's age, they are very street wise and aren't likely to be the ones taken for a ride.  But let's keep fiction and reality separate.  As long as Micky isn't duped into something illegal or perminant changes to his body then I'm OK with it. ... and I'm the number-one person that will object criminal activity by the enabler in these stories.  

My only complaint is that I get about ten minutes reading from each segment.  I'm chomping at the bit to get to the "action."

Thank you for this wonderful story!!!  So well written - so gentle - yet - serious about the changes.  I think I feel a little like Jenn feels right after arriving at work wanting to be back with Michelle. You are a great writer.  

I just got done with Part 5...what a wonderful story and why couldn't something similar have happened to me!!!  My only complaint is I'm going crazy waiting for the next part!!!

Maybe I missed something here.  Where does Micky stay at night.  I know he's homeless.........maybe I missed something

Its a story I know but poor poor mite. Our society should hang its head in shame because there is poor kids like that out there.I hope it turns out good for him /her later on

Gawd! what morals some people have over a story!  I think you're doing a grand job; no violence, no pressure on Micky, very origional approach.  But can't you get you segments coming qiucker? good story looking forward to the next part.

Are you the same Jenn who works in the museum that I deliver bottled water to? If so, I have a question about your story. I have heard that you recently adopted a girl named Michelle. If so, how much of this story is fiction and how much is true? Just curious. And don't worry my wife and I have a "weekend daughter" ourselves.

Oh well if you think it is harsh or too dark for you or that I am reveling some evil or darkside, then my suggestion to you is this, go read some other story and not mine. No one forced you to read mine. You don't even know me so don't judge before you know someone. Yes I am a bitch at times, but being a GG entitles me too. ;)

Jenn

Leaving him on the street seems a bit harsh

I understand it adds to the impetus for him to become her to get off the street, but still

Excellent step by step approach to the introduction of the dresses

I can't wait for the next one

I have to agree with Pippa about reabandoning  this child for the weekend.  I Would have more comfortable if Jenn would taken the boy in order to get to know him and find out why he's a runaway

Jenn has written a real gem.  This story is the fantasy that I never got to realize, except of course that I did not want to be poor and lonely.  I would love to allow Jenn to dress me in anything she likes.  I hope to be able toread the entire story in the near future.

Thanks for a great story Jenn.
Barbara Ann

PS: We miss you!

I can't argue a bit with Pippa's observations. Mikey/Micky is a child in dire straits and appears to be on the verge of being used by a young woman with somewhat questionable motives.

And just where is Maxine Gray when she is needed?

I'm uncomfortable with this.  Young innocent boys don't really survive on the streets, girls even less so.  Dressing him in girl's clothes and re-abandoning him for the weekend?  Not very maternal.  I realize it's a fantasy, but this is making my skin crawl, and I mean that in a bad way.

I loved part 1 and part 2 This is a fun story to read.

I like it so far. Im hoping you'll start him as a much younger little girl once you get him home and into a real little girl bed.

loved the first two parts- they are different from the usual.  I look forward to the next chapter

Hmmmm!  Interesting

Okay you got me, keep the story coming.  :)
Hugs,Fran

Yea! What they said!

Arrgh! A teaser!
*sounds of gnashing impatient teeth*

your story is interesting. definately needs some spelling changes. besides all of that i'm waiting to read the next chapter. please.

Missy (from tg fotos)

I have some hesitations about this story, but then I also have some real hopes for it.Jennifer has a nice touch in setting the stage.

Jenn's motivations, on the other hand, even though we know this isn't the first time she has indulged her penchant for crossdressing by others, are potentially of a dark nature.

Jennifer, this is a good start to a very good story line. Please continue this, as I want to see the reaction of a boy being given girl's clothing.

Keep up the good work.

Barbara Lynn Terry

Interesting.

A good idea - it is easy to see how the boy would welcome being feminised.  I am looking forward to the next installment - hopefully a longer installment?

I agree, a gradual seduction, with the boy subtly changed, would be very nice to read about.  A great start and looking forward to the next installment.

very good start....

I like the idea of starting slow and building up to full-out girl clothes. Makes it seem much more possible!

Throw in some hypnotism to give the boy some girlish traights and you will have my ideal story.

Please keep it realistic.

Thanks for writing,
Sara