Disgusting.

Thank you for your exciting story. It got right to it. Made me feel very passionate.

The idea is good and has potential to be very good, but you need to develop it some more...give us a little more to bite into.

As for the spelling and grammar, I have to agree with Pervy, though if you have a look at the comments on The Oracle you can see I had that problem too...still do to some extent, I make up the rules of grammar and punctuation as I go along.

I like the story and the idea, but it could be much more...

Take care and keep at it, if you are after a hand at all pop into Chatroom 1 at the weekend in the evening US time (night UK), or throw a copy at me...I dont mind helping, if you want.

Huggles,

Hypatia

A potentially good story, but it needs spell checking and better
punctuation, and it should be broken up into paragraphs.  Am I
being picky?  Perhaps, but you want to give your readers pleasure,
don't you?  These things really matter: read Stephen King's book
about writing if you don't believe me.  There's also a credibility
problem: what doctor would just go ahead with surgery without any
preliminary work?  He's up against the Harry Benjamin standards,
to begin with.  He could get sued into the poorhouse.  Okay, it's
a fantasy, I'll grant you, but even in fantasies you have to start
with something realistic for the best effect.

But I like the basic idea a lot.  There are too few stories in
which a man is feminized by another man, and this has all the
makings of a really *hot* story!  But, please, take some care in
your writing!  Be proud of your work.

Pervy