KRcJlG you have brought up a very  fantastic  points ,  thankyou  for the post.

b69Z71 Thanks for the article post.Really thank you! Really Great.

The true magic of the world resides in the minds of children,
You have brought that magic forth.

Please continue with this story I would love to know how it ends

This is great! The magical world of childhood is right there, the altered time sense, the heightened fantasy world. Too bad about Billy's mom, I hope there's a happier turn in sight. Thanks for your writing

Truly delightfully told by a magical story teller. I hope you will find it in your heart to continue.

As I see it, with this story you are at a turning point. There is just enough foreshadowing for us to know that there is an unpleasant turn in the road ahead for our young protagonist. How you carry it out is a MAJOR indicator of your quality as an up-and-coming writer.

I would remind you that at one point Stephen King was so unhappy with the way his novel "Carrie" was going that he threw the entire manuscript away. It was because his wife saw promise in the story and salvaged it from the garbage that we were blessed with the writings of the current master of the genre. And look how long it took George Lucas to decide to bring his tale of the rise and fall of Anakim Skywalker to the screen.

Don't give up on this story just because the writing will be a little difficult and unhappy times might be ahead for Billy. The story is just too good to give up on.

Have you written the next installment of it? If so where is it so I can read it.

Interesting Story When wEll it conclude?

Keep Writing this tale. It is WONDERFUL!

Having read the third installment I had to write you.

I must stress the joy I it brings me to read such a well written story.  The characters are easy to believe and the paceing of the narrative has an oral tradition feel.  

The only quibbles are of a personal nature, where I would have suggested alternative wordings for my own clarity.  (Ahh to be the editor... ^^)

I can only recommend that you continue to write; be it this story or another, please, keep writing.  As others have pointed out you present a professional product, and I look forward to commenting on it when you have completed it.

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Pol

"Let me know if I should continue with this one," you wrote.  Yes!  Oh, yes!  Pretty please, with big blue eyes and fluttering eyelashes, oh please do!

Kristy,

This is only the second time I have read a selection that I felt compelled to comment on.

I wish to commend you on an extremely well-written story. Have you ever considered doing this professionally? You certainly have a knack for holding the reader's attention as you develop each of the characters.

I hope that Chrissie does not soon realize how the sight of her panties affects Billie, thus affording him numerous additional opportunities to feast his eyes on her intimate apparel. Then when she finally comprehends the extent of this influence she wields, I would hope that she will take full advantage of it.

This part of Billie's life has become very exciting for him. I can only hope that circumstances come about to mellow his mother's attitude, thus making an improvement in his home life.

Eagerly looking forward to future installments!

Should you continue???   P-U-L-E-A-S-E!!!!!!!!!!!!! You must be kidding, right??  Story's great and I love your work--More please--Sharlee

Wonderful start to what should be a great tale (in the classic sense)!  Your writing has an almost timeless grace to it, drawing a reader into it.  Please continue, a talent like yours is rare enough in this world and ought to be shared.  Take care,
Diane

I don't normally post comments on this stuff but...do continue this story! The story has a strong beginning, and it's not often that I find a story that can easily pull me into it.

I'm really looking forward for further chapters.

Yes. A very good job telling this start of a story. The subtle plays at humor increase the pleasure of perusing. I am looking forward to the next installment.

wow

huggles Kristy

Wows! You sure gots a magic cwayon in your hand!  I didn't just read it, I became Billy's shadow and lived it.  I dont think anyone could have wrote that with more life than you just did.  I cant wait to experience more.  You have a quite a gift, thanks for sharing it with me.

Maggie da Kitten

Nice beginning; the charcters have drawn me in. I enjoy the subtle hints of things to come...