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The Second Test
by Sarah Bayen

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Comment by Pippa K. on 12/20/04
During Crystal's year-end hiatus, I find myself going back and looking for stories I haven't already read.  This is a strange, but utterly captivating ode to Motherhood.  Coupled, of course, to an amazing story of dominance and submission.  It comes across much more as an epic poem to desire, love, sex, childbirth, and then more love and desire than it does a simple story of unwilling transformation.  In this season when we celebrate what many consider the most important and mystical birth, it couldn't be more timely reading.

Comment by Alex on 08/21/04
That it doesn't have a begining, no problem.  A lot of good stories start that way.  But unless there's a sequel, you kind of leave the readers with no clue of what is to happen.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 08/20/04
A well written story, but unfortunately  one that proves those old sayings "No good deed goes unpunished"  and "Nice guys finish last".  



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