a good story , forget the negative comments

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nice well written story with much feeling

Sweet story told well .keep up the good work

Congratulations Scott!
Very good story!
Kisses.
Silvia.

Nice story, as before the spelling and punctuation needed correcting, i liked the storyline, but his feelings were not emphasised enough. thank you for posting.

The Truth will set us free, but first it scares the U-no-what our of us - but worth every pain  of the ride.

Very cute little story. It's 'leave it to beaver' with a postmodern aegis. Like SassySue says, the lack of punctuation is very noticeable; though whether it distracts that much from the story may be subjective opinion....I think it accents the innocence of the narrator. Nevertheless, the story does need editing, some proofreading etc and I encourage Scott to have it done, if not on 'Secrets Revealed' then the next story!
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Nice story for a first time author.  I can certainly understand the confusion that both Scott and Jeff felt.  Thanks for posting it.  

However, the lack of quotation marks was really anoying, making it difficult to read and understand.  Please consider having someone help you with puntuation and proof reading. Volunteer editors are avialable at Crystal's site at http://www2.storysite.org/editorslist.html

Also,I would have liked to read more about Scott's feelings during the lovemaking.

Please don't be discouraged by my criticisms.  Your writing shows promise, but could benefit from guidance from an editor.

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