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Shock to the System
by Julie O

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Comment by Silvia    (from Brazil) on 04/18/09
As always you wrote a lovely story.
And as always, I loved it to much!
Kisses.
Silvia.

Comment by Briar on 04/14/08
I liked the story for several reasons - the supportive behaviour of the others, the exploration of how even after a change in physical gender, the orientation remained as before.  This is generally true, but most people exploring accidental changes have overlooked that.  The general tolerance, and the few that were not getting their cumuppance.  Good characterization, good pace of plot - it would have been so tempting to go into details of dressing and attitude adjustments, but that would have made it boring.  All told, a well told tale by a competent author.  Thank you for sharing it with us.

Comment by (AJ) Eric on 11/04/05
Nicely done.  You've made some choices here -- what scenes to present and which to summarize, character reactions, that sort of thing -- that strike me as different from the norm and therefore more interesting.

(In particular, there can't be many writers in this genre who would have resisted the temptation to give the villain a forced-femme taste of the machine.  Setting up the conditions the way you did and then not having any of the characters even consider it -- that's almost a hall-of-fame caliber red herring...)

Eric

Comment by SassySue on 12/31/04
Great story!  Well written and entertaining.  Hope, one day in the not too distant future this method of sex change does become feasible.

Keep up the good work!

SS

Comment by Kristi on 11/22/04
P.S. Sorry - just noticed first comments by another Kristi. Sorry if confusing

Comment by Kristi on 11/22/04
Really really enjoyed it! Love exploring through your story both the technical & emotional details ..    & looking forward to whereever you lead us :)

Comment by Kristi Fitzpatrick on 11/22/04
Hi again Julie:

This is a fun story and while not going deep into the psychological aspects it is enjoyable as a quick read. I really wish you would show us more of the love scenes that were happening. But that is your choice of course. I would have liked more detail at the end of the story instead of a synopsis style and especially of their trip in California.

I know it is hard to write a short story and this is a really fun and light one. Another good job. Bye the way your punctuation and grammar have leaped light years ahead. I didn't even think about it this time.  Thought I should say that, as we were all harping on that in our comments of the past.

Thanks again for sharing your story and thank you for continuing to write. So many authors stop writing leaving their fans, and yes I am one of your fans, incredibly disappointed. Thank you for continuing to keep up the good work.

Hugs,

Kristi



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