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Skirting Disaster
by Elsa B

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Comment by Aleesha on 10/18/10
Straight to the point, OK so far.

Comment by Richard Hanson on 06/03/08
Well Elsa B. When are we going to see that next chapter of this adventure that you have left us hanging for almost Four years now?  Richard

Comment by Evonne on 07/31/04
Really enjoyed the story. Am really looking forward to the next chapter.
Hugs
Evonne

Comment by Elsa.b on 04/18/04
Re sex scenes. Please bear with me on these as they are an integral part of the story in my mind. In life people DO indulge in 'GRATUITOUS SEX', just for fun. However in the story , they are an attempt at showing the nature of some of the characters and how they releive their tensions. In Elsa's case , they attempt to show the conflict between the male she was, and the female she is becoming. This is where my skills ,as an author,fall down perhaps.If that was not clear , then I apologise to my readers.
     Elsa.b

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 04/17/04
<< As they hugged Elsa felt Allys' hands start to wander to her lower regions caressing her bottom gently. >>

After part 2, I have to reenforce my comments from part 1.  This has the potential to be a really great story, but I, at least, am put off by the sex that just seems to not fit the rest of the story and added as an afterthought as if the author thought, "Oh, gosh, I have to have sex in this story."  For example the above.  Elsa is just out of the hospital, Ally, Eric's secretary, see's Elsa for the first time, and her first thoughts are so sexual that she decides to grope her, her boss!! ???  It just seems like this would be a better story without the swinging and lesbian sex.  It IS good story every other way, though, and I will stick around for part 3.

Comment by Francine on 04/16/04
Thank you Elsa for continuing the story.  :)

Please keep it going.

Hugs, Fran

Comment by jim on 10/25/03
Skirting disaster
A great story I cannot wait for the next installment.(any hints when this may be???)
Thanks
Jim

Comment by Cassandra on 10/21/03
Dear, this is the start of what I believe will be a very nice story. I read with enjoyment the opening chapter and believe you have a nice style of telling a story. Unfortunately it seems, you took a turn to pursue another plot. The gratuitous lesbian love scene seems so wrong , unless you plan to tie it into the general theme of Elsa's transformation. I'll look forward to part 2 to see how you weave this unwelcome sidetrack into the story line.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 10/19/03
I enjoyed this until you unexpectedly went off on what seems to be an entirely gratuitous lesbian sex scene.   I will read part 2 as I'm assuming there is a reason for it that has to do with Eric's story and that it wasn't  just a "Ohmygawd, I can't submit this without a sex scene" thought.

I thought Eric accepted his change way too easily the first time, I would think that going forced ultra femme the second time when "she" is supposedly going to swing 180o to perhaps violent non-acceptance would push "him" over the edge rather than help "her."

It might be interesting to bring the girlfriend who thought him effeminate back into the story.


Comment by Jane Hudson on 10/19/03
Great story loved it.A real nicely told story



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