God help me, I put aside a whole atfneroon to figure this out.

one thing i dont like that u do u make it sound like all tomboys want to be male im atomboy kinda girl and i have no desire to be mael it makes me sick to even think of ( not to soudn rude to FtM in any ways)

i just dont liek to whear make up or look pretty or nothin like that

nice story with lots of detail, if only such a book could be found lol

I like body swap stories and yours  was well written and carried me along. Jake's obsession with Kate was well handled as was the body swap. You gave a great sense that soemthing was wrong when Kate did not contact Jake in her body. The feelings of a man in female body were well done. The Hen party was well handled and felt real. I wonder if women do do as much penis decorations?  You must love clothes as the dressing was well desirbed  especially the wedding dress which was done in loving detail. Kate's  rightious fury at Jake was well handled when they at last met. Alsdo it was a nice touch her being a tomboy.
But after that the story  fell apart. You had some glaring plot holes. first you stated early that Jake had looked for a love potion in the magic book but didn't find one that's the  eason he decided to steal his friends body. But then she finds one and slips on to Jake in her old body so 'she' will fall in love. Then after all the build up of Jake not being able to control the feelings earlier in Kate's body torawds his friends male form this new female body loved him you have Kate in jakes body suddenly turnng gay. Jake liked women and so wwould his body aaccording to thee logic of your story. It woul have been better if the new Jake had  taken up his Kate's sister or bridesmaid.
But then what do I know