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The Spencer Girls
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Comment by Ali on 11/22/12
can you tell us where you will be continuing this story, it's an amazing piece. Comment by al on 09/17/12 Aside from punctuation, spelling, grammar, I thought the story line was well formed and easy to read/follow. I would suggest that you follow up on another site that allows for the addition/continuation of the story. Comment by Cannon on 12/13/11 It's imperative that more ppoele make this exact point. Comment by ashley steele on 05/26/11 basically, the reason that I stopped writing was because you can longer summit stories on this storysite Comment by Silvia. on 10/23/10 Why you never finishes your stories? Comment by Jackie on 08/02/08 I was captivated with this story from the moment I started it. It would be tragic if you don't finish the job. Even with your commit that it was too complicated i feel with the talent you have already shone that you could and sould finish it. Comment by Yoron on 06/07/08 Why did you stop writing it? Comment by Briar Lorenz on 12/06/07 YES I agree wuth Vivien and everyone else - Please do carry on with this reallay good story. More More More please. Comment by Vivien on 09/23/07 I sure do hope that you do intend to finish this wonderful story!? the acceptance that this girl has recieved is amazing! The story is simply wonderful! The love and comraderie is tremendous and the love is beyond words for teenagers! The whole story is great and yet it is unfinished. Please do finish this wonderful story all right? Comment by Debra002 on 06/04/07 I've just read your story please please tell me that you have more in the pipework as I have loved what you have written so far Comment by Jade on 06/28/06 Hey Ashley I get that your busy it takes a while to get things posted but please send in more for this story and I'll do Anything Story your leaving us to hang for this long is not always fun to us the readers of your well writen Stories! Comment by juliej on 05/18/06 I have read the whole story and i find that it is great the story unfolds well the grammer is very good its an interesting story so far with the twist regarding the kidnapping comming at the right timehow the story unfolds even more the doc involved its just great well done more please asap thankyou Comment by rone on 01/18/06 I read some of the comments and agree this is a good story that needs to be extended for more adventures of amy ....4.5" is a good higth for a child with a imballance or medical problems ...not to worry about size but the content ....good story line and charters love the way you did this without cuss words or wierd sex stuff these were not needed for a excelant writer....thank you Comment by Stephen Hoye on 10/01/05 Ashley, Comment by ashley steele on 09/27/05 in reponce to Jezzi's first question, I will try to clear up her confusion. in regard to the other teachers thinking that amy is a real girl. I had tried to convey the situation where as Andy was one of those teenagers that are pretty much invisible in where he was hardly noticed and thus wasn't missed when he left town. as for the teachers that did remember him--the news from Sandy made much more sense. remember that Sandy and her husband had a fifty dollar bet on what sex Andy was, as was the whole town of Rivervale. Comment by ashley steele on 09/27/05 in responce to Jessi's question about rachel wiping for Amy, I mention that AMy had been glad that his/her mother had gotten her a new type of gaff that hidden his penis. but there will be another reason that rachel couldn't tell. as for her other question, thanks for bringing it to my attention Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 09/27/05 after part 8 Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 09/27/05 After part 4 Comment by Jade on 09/26/05 I love this story keep it up You brought in intresting part in part 7. I wonder if you have amy change her mind and go all out as a girl! Comment by John on 09/25/05 Hi Ashley Comment by julie j on 03/28/05 this story is great the emotions andyu is going through hjis acceptance by the girls after what he done this is a really great story this story if it carries on tin the way will be one of the best on the site it is truly amazing and facinating it is also well written and very well told i am very impressed with it please get thenext parts as soon as possible brilliant story more please Comment by Early June on 01/09/05 I normally wouldn't comment again, so soon on a story, but this one is so good (ch 05), I feel the need to comment in order to show interest. You have such a good story going, I KNOW the interest is there and you already have more comments than some whole series get. Yes, you have earned it. Please continue, as we are all waitng "on tenter hooks" for the next developments. Why is Amy doing better in class? Is is because she doesn't have the fear of reprisal that Andy had if he excelled? What are all the other cheerleaders (usually very cliquish) when they find Amy has a uniform and none of them was consulted? Is Andy prepared for the Doctor's conclusion from the tests? Comment by Rone on 01/05/05 Way to go nice clean fun love the story .... Comment by Angel O'Hare on 01/02/05 Just love what you are doing with this story. You need some help with a bit of proofing and such. If you would like, I could help you out with that. Comment by John on 01/01/05 Hi I just got done reading your new chapter and I had to re-read the whole thing cause its that good. I hope you continue to story and dont take to long writing the next chapter. Comment by Pippa K. on 11/07/04 The story is coming along very nicely. I'm enjoying each part more and more. Keep up the good work. Comment by Annie O on 11/05/04 I agree with the "Male Lesbian" part, as I "feel" closer to females than males! I would like to see Andy keep all those male parts intact. Comment by Kristi Fitzpatrick on 10/24/04 Well Hello Ashley: Comment by Sissy Baby Paula on 10/24/04 I just love this story!!! Andy is finding out that Amy is perhaps what she is supposed to be. And the friends she is making! The story is SOO lovely written! Please do continue! And as soon as You just can! (or I just die...) Comment by John on 10/22/04 Hi Ashley Comment by Early June on 10/05/04 I've just finished part 03. This is a good job. No, it is better than good. You are fashioning a very nice tale and I am eager to see how you resolve it. Thank you for your efforts. Comment by Ashley Steele on 10/05/04 In responce to Jezzi's suggestion, I have revised part one and changed Andy/Amy's height to 5'2". I had to agree with her that 4'5" was too short for a fifteen year old. Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 10/05/04 After part 3 Comment by Rena on 09/28/04 I love this story I can see a huge improvement on your grammar and keeping the story in one mind setting instead switch from first to third person repeatedly in some of your other stories. your a talanet writer in the making. Please finish this and some of your other stories. Comment by Annabel on 09/22/04 I have just read part 2. I enjoyed the story and found the grammer a little unorthodox, but perfectly adequate to make the story readable. The spelling is pretty good. Comment by fregen on 09/21/04 Ashley, Comment by ashley Steele on 09/20/04 When I started this story, I had never thought it would create so much interest. I admit that I am not the best writer (I stick to my day job and I'm not giving it up.) I've revised part one and continue to work on my grammer. Thanks for the suggestions and I will keep them in mind as I develop as a better writer. Comment by Karen E. Lea on 09/19/04 Hi Ashley, Comment by leah on 09/18/04 Hello, Ms Steele! Comment by Tina Michelle Smith on 09/17/04 Not bad, Ashley, but you do need to work on your grammar and punctuation. It detracts from an otherwise enjoyable story. Comment by Angel O'Hare on 08/30/04 Ashley, Comment by annie o on 08/30/04 Suggest size change to 5'3" -- small for male. Also -- suggestions: a little true "friendship" development between Amy and Linda (she's not too crazy abt jocks), maybe a friendship w/Nikki (She kinda likes the idea of a guy in a dress), and girls in semi-finals game, Amy goes missing, and they find they really need their mascot. Comment by tanyalynn on 08/30/04 Great start, but please work on the grammar. Please dont leave this one unfinished. Comment by Vince on 08/30/04 The Spencer Girls is definitely the kind of story that needs "MORE".. Comment by A Reader on 08/29/04 Yes, four foot five inch is a little too small for a male! Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 08/29/04 A good start to what's looking to be a sweet, loving story; bravo! However, you really should work on the grammar and proofread before posting. I thought when you made him so short he was going to end up a little girl. Very few high school girls or women are as short as 4'5". I'd like to see his three so-called friends in school in skirts! Comment by Stephanie on 08/29/04 A cute story to start with nice potential, but PLEASE,use some proper grammar! Stop going back and forth with past and present tenses. Also use some comma's and periods, they work wonders for run-on sentences. I know it's a bit late in the story, but, don't you think Andy/Amy should have been a little taller than 4'5". This height is more of an 8 year old, not a 15 year old girl. I'm sure you could correct that in any future stories that you would write. keep Comment by Eric on 08/29/04 A reasonably good start. But PLEASE find an editor, or read things over more carefully, before you post. With a young teenage narrator, I can accept things like run-on sentences and awkward paragraphs. But your inconsistent use of quotation marks and your switching from past tense to present and back make an awful lot of that middle section unclear to me -- I think there are story problems there but I can't be sure that I'm not just reading it wrong. Comment by Sharlee Snyder on 08/28/04 The start is well done. Please just tell us your wonderful story with out "The end or maybe not," bit. I find that controlling which I willnot deal with. You are an excellent author and do not need to reduce yourself to a ploy used by hack's wanting to be begged to continue some mindless masturbatory dreck. That said, please tell us the rest of the story, or just drop it here--Sharlee Comment by Rose on 08/28/04 Great first part. Cannot wait for the second part. |
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