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This was a amazing story you did excellent in writing it.  There may have been a few grammar and spelling errors but so very little that it didn't harm the story at all.  Though I would have liked to have read the reaction to everything that Jaina told her mother and the bit where even Jacen got time to talk to her mother.  And though Luke is mention throughout the story I still would have liked to read and seen more of a role for him in the story.  But otherwise this was a lovely story and though would be harder would have loved to seen more of these stories such like a series even if it's only on the net.

I am a Star Wars fan I have most of the books except the younger years . I am going like reading this story.

I wish it was in book form so I could put it with my other books. Now I have to be on the look out for more stories like this one.

Thank you, for taking the time to write such a story.


Cassandra    

STAR WARS!!!!!!

Yes!!!!

I guess I can't thank you enough for bringing this tale to life.  As a fan of Star Wars both the movies and the books it was fun to see a different twist to some of my favs.  Young Jedi Tales are amoung my tops, Tendal Ka has always been to be the younger model of Mara (who is the hottest female in Star Wars)  Seeing her and Jacen loving each other openly and seeing the heart break they undergo in this story was perfect.  It also helps that this doesn't go into the crap that the New Jedi Order books have gone, but that is neither here nor there.  One request.   Can we have more of this story line :)  I'd love to see Jacen and Tendal together more, perhaps some adventure causing them to remain together as girls  (hint, hint)

Anyway this story ROCKS.  And for you fans of Star Wars it will be a fun romp around.  For those who don't like Star Wars?  Well Shame on you and read this story!!!  

-j-