Well, Sherla has come to grips with her transformation. Now she wants to destroy her arch enemy,yet live on. Tigger, please, stop the love play between sherla and company. This story is starting to sound like a Seasons house story.

Both of the chapters have so far been great.  I'm on Chapter 14 right now.  Occasional lapses, like the shout-out to the medallion of Zulo didn't belong, and the writing was on the verge of going harlequin romantic when Katrina fell into bed with Sherla, but overall very, very impressive.  I found what I think is a glitch in Chapter 14 when Frau Buchner greets her as Sherla; I thought she'd gone to the Scientific Society party as Joan.

Are the comments page the place to attack other reader's comments?  I don't think I would have continued to read this far into the story if I was not interested.  Writers often go off track in their stories.  Novelists and publishers of novelists have groups who read the manuscript and make changes before the books are ever published.  And it isn't just spelling and grammer they correct.

If one rejects the premise for a story, then why continue reading it?  And having established that it was not written the way you think it should be done, why say so over and over and over and . . . ?  

Logically, Kim, your comments are 'out of place.'

By the way, for other potential readers, I like the story, and it all seems quite well-integrated to me.  In 'Veni, Veni, Vici' the physical changes are essentially over, but the emotional changes (including sexuality) provide a rich field for exploration.  Not everyone is interested in character depth, or passion, or the sweet-sour tang of naivete and experience at the same time, but for those who are, this is an excellent story.  However, it's not a short one where the old person is quickly destroyed so that the new can spring forth complete and comfortable in her new life.  For me, that's a positive thing.  

But that's an opinion, so take it for what it's worth.  Like any other opinion someone chooses to leave.  

Part 12 was a let down.  Just filler material?  And I think Holmes can count how many drinks he/she had.  The ending doesn't deserve a comment.    Most of part 12 was out of place.

I thought the comment about the Medallion in part 11 was out of place within this story, and it added nothing to the story.

You made a mistake about the roses.  I won't tell you exactly what for now, but think about one of the real stories.  Also, Holmes wasn't as cold hearted and unemotional as you painted him to be.  Think about some of the other stories that depicted the real Holmes.

Part 4 was certainly a letdown.  I hope this isn't the direction the story is going.  If so, I will take my leave now.

Pity, the story had such promise.

Part 2 already!  Ah, the game is afoot!