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Sung
by Peter Joseph

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Comment by legionoxo on 09/03/12
okay, granted it needs some editing and spell check. but the story itself was enjoyable/entertaining and got me  curious to check out the  aborigine culture.  So thank you for sharing your work with us.
 blessed be.

Comment by Silvia. on 04/08/10
BAD BAD BAD BAD BAD......................
Silvia.

Comment by Nikki on 06/11/03
The changes back and forth between first and third person disrupt the flow of the story- decide which one you're going to use, and stick with it. Also, too many pronouns- I had trouble figuring out who was doing or saying what. The story is billed as not complete, so I assume we'll eventually find out what Beverley's motivation is. By the way, after she drugged him, why not just deliver him immediately to the aborigines, rather than having him wander around? He might have gone the wrong way- (possibly to be attacked and devoured by dingos). I do appreciate the Bush setting- would like to see more of Australian /aboriginal culture and landscape in future installments.



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