Not one of you authors believe in karma or I would go away satisfied at reading this kid turned the tables on these assholes. People just love to think of themselves as good people but there really are not that many good people among the masses. A good person would NEVER enter into such a destructive conspiracy against another person.

a great story well worth reading more please

god what a disaster, a perfect scene for massive revenge of the killing kind, this could easily drive a guy insane

You've got to finish the story!  What happens in part 2?

the end or is it I feel a lot more could be made out of this story
a good story and hopefully there will be additions to it

Good story just needs to go into more detail. Maybe more
dressing details. The story is marked done and I think
it kind of ends at a stop. Over all its a great start.

Great story, I liked it a lot.  Lot's of tease with scenes that will happen in the future but not just then.  Being dressed and put on a bus home, pics in the mail, leave a juicy feel in my groin.  Having him kneeling in just panties is a good touch too.  Keep up the good work.  My only complaint was, why didn't you leave us with him actually 'giving what he wanted the girlfriend to give'.


Stefani V.

a excellent concept with the story. Great how the kid pleaded for mercy.