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Swan Song
by Ann O'Nonymous

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Comment by Elizbeth Cathryn Mystery on 10/17/23
Looking at the story publishing dates, this does seem to be Ann's last story.  Whatever you are doing:-
We miss you Ann and hope you are safe and well.
Warm hugs and blankets wrapped around you.

Comment by thisisme on 06/05/13
I'm pretty sure what would happen. The women would deny any nafarious intent and simply claim to be doing what he 'secretly' wanted. The kid would never get any satisfaction short of standing center to them strapped in an explosive vest.

Comment by this is me on 07/27/12
The more women these stories stack up against one guy the more unbelievable the story becomes. Yes I do believe that generally women have a bigotry against men. But I don't think that bigotry can overtake so many women so completely that they totally lose their empathy and compassion especially when it is dealing with women of relation to the guy.


Comment by Stephen on 07/07/11

I have to admit that  was a terrible place to stop !!!!  I am glad you  brought up the knife!!! and  hope you dont have  him "talked " into accepting  his  "fate" . this  is  a nice  continuation to the first  part about Russel . You need  to have  these "ladies" have  consequences for their actions , maybe Russel will commit suicide ,maybe turn serial killer ......but I will lose  faith in you  if  he majically changes  his mind  and decides  to stay a hormonally destroyed  freak ......a man who is a woman who is a man in a womans  body ..........Mom needs  to consider what  she has done  and the police  and Child Protective Services  need to be called in ......this  is  not like your other stories  , this  lad  is  in serious psychological trouble ,
      if  you  have  him change to a woman  you are as much of a monster as all those  animals  that rape ,abuse ,beat,and kill ladies ..........   sorry  you took us there !!!! his masculine identity is too well established .......and mom should  have left it at what his aunt had done  ,not alienate  her son from her ......nice work "mom"  

Comment by Silvia. on 09/15/10
I think that in a near future, he may become so angry, he can kill all their tormentors.
Silvia.

Comment by Silvia. on 09/14/10
What a bad story you wrote!
Very bad..................................
Silvia.

Comment by Anonymous on 11/26/09
This one is the best one that I've read so far. While most I've started, you can't stop because you want to know the ending, this one seems more realistic. The target of the petticoat punishment, isn't as lame and rebels by confronting his mom, sister, his sister's girlfriend - all in front of the audience he invited. The questions he threw at his mother were excellent, all in an attempt to find justification. I hope the continuation comes soon.

Comment by Yoron on 05/23/08
This one do need an ending.
He need a sane relative to help him.

It is easy to see that they are living in a dysfunctional family.
From such a family even feelings of love will come out twisted.
And 'unconditional Love' only a dream.

That's the kind of family you desperately want to run away from.
I'm not saying that orphanages or homeless shelters are better though.

They might or they might not be.
But the kids reaction is very understandable.
The mother and his relatives are not.

And growing up like that can create strange cravings.
So if you come from such a hell, break that vicious circle.
Don't expose your kids to the same hell.

cheers
Yoron.


Comment by juliej on 04/06/07
a sad story with a twist at thend but i felt it needed more thought to go with this story it does not go as far as to explain how it all started ths i feel needs more work all the other stories i have read are great

Comment by Mandee on 12/02/06
Hi Ann,
  I too love your work.  Am I to assume that this was the last because you are sick of being transgendered?  Was this the autobiographical final vomiting in response to a forced crossdressing experience you had as a young boy?  Are you still sitting with a bellyfull of rage against your Mom and/or other female relatives?  If so I am so sorry that happened to you.  I was threatened with it in my youth by a nurse in a children's shelter for bad behavior and I ran away- the thought was so tramatic.  I would have loved it- but didn't want her or anyone else to know.  
   I find it hard to believe that you could have written so many stories with such conviction and insight based only on an unnatural "forced-femme" personality.  Did you mean to tell us that you are not naturally transgendered?  Can't believe it!
Hugs
Mandee

Comment by rone on 07/07/06
 He has finely comfronted those that caused a major problem for him .. he did not want the change , but it was pushed on him and came to a head .... he has been destroyed and will not respect anybody again ...those he trusted and needed to help him grow , were the ones that caused him the most pain....
well written and thought prevocaing ..
thank you  Rone

Comment by chrisl on 11/09/05
I think this story rails against the gender binery Male or Female.

For some transsexuals the transition from pretending to be a manly man to a natural congruent life invests itself with the female stereotypes.

Personally I enjoy being traditional femanist and do not seek that
middle ground where birth certificates can remain unchanged.

In my own mind Annie'O is describing Gender Queer, seeking the best in humanity from the perpective of both genders.
 

Comment by Anne on 10/19/05
Sorry: that line should have read: ". . . could form their own opinion." As Jezzi sez, "Arrrrrgh."

Comment by Juliette Lima on 10/19/05
Well written and like the boy no reader can understand why they are feminizing him. They do it for the same reason a dog licks its genitals, because they can. Tyranny is always unfathomable to the free and the horrors presented are unfortunately actually effected on some in our society. A clear picture beautifully drawn of an ugly scene. Leave them wanting more that's good theater.

Comment by Tina Michelle Smith on 10/17/05
To answer a question you posed, Ann, had I been Russell I would have used the Bowie knife on my captors.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 10/17/05
First, let me say that I like what you have written and have no criticsm of what you have written.  The idea of a victim (or at least Russell sees himself as a victim) confronting his victimizers is a pleasing one to me.  I also can see why you are reluctant to come up with a sequel.  When a number of people, myself included, begged for a sequel to "Hasty Act", you complied, then found the sequel lambasted by readers (again, myself included).  My problem with this current piece is that you comment:

<<  I deliberately left the end open, so the reader could for their options as to what will happen!  >>

What I see is not that what you've written is "bad" but that you haven't written enough for us to come up with endings without also coming up with middles.  I don't think we have been given enough information to come up with just an ending.  We know what was done and who did it.  We know what he thinks is why they did it, but we have nothing from the women themselves.  We also don't know why he put up with the feminization if he hated it so much; he's not a little kid.  No mention was made of how they made him go along with it.  There is also no reason given as to why all the feminizers all agreed to be at this meeting; it is implied that it is at his invitation, but the passing out of cakes and cookies indicates they didn't know he was going to do what he did.  To put it another way, it seems to me that of the six journalists' questions we are given answers to Who? and What?  and are asked to come up with our own answers to Where? When?  How? and, most importantly, Why? before we can envision an ending.

Comment by cheryl lynn on 10/16/05
i am more worried over the "my swan song" than anything else.  I enjoy your stories and I would hate to see you stop writing.  just sat my assumption is all wrong.  thanks

Comment by Ann O'Nonymous on 10/16/05
To my Readers: Sorry, no sequel.
  Please, put youself in Russell's shoes, and imagine what is happening to him. Try to feel his emotional distress -- he's not TG, and doesn't want to change his sex. he's giving to knife to his mother to force a decision, not that he hates her, but does want her affection and this could make her see how wrong she's been.
 Try placing yourself in the mother's position -- see her feelings, or lack of them. Is she destroying any chance for a future, giving him something better -- and for whom?
  I deliberately left the end open, so the reader could for their options as to what will happen!
     

Comment by fregen on 10/16/05
And then?  A good boy is abused by his female relatives and is justifibly angry.  Okay.  Their reasons?  We can speculate but have no insights into what they were thinking.  The outcome?  He accepts his fate?  Refuses?  Goes off the deep end?  Unless there is more to come this story leaves me hanging.

Comment by Early June on 10/15/05
I have liked everything tha Ann Has done.  I am totally confused by this.  I must have missed something.  This is the first of her pieces that does not seem complete, either in concept or in execution.  The style of writing even seems different, the tempo being clipped.  An anger, or perhaps some other deep emotion, seems to be overcoming normal activity.  
On the plus side, it held, no, it riveted my attention.   I couldn't stop until I was through.  But then, I had to read it again to make certain i didn't miss something.
Is there a sequel? Is there a further story that will build on this base?  If so, I will eagerly look forward to it as I always like Ann's stories.
 Thank you for trusting us with this Ann.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 10/15/05
So where is the rest ??  What's the reaction?  Why DID they feminize him - assuming he's telling the truth and he didn't do any of the usual things that would cause women to petticoat a boy?  Arrrrggghh!

Nice twist with the use of the knife.

Comment by Sissy Baby Paula on 10/14/05
A story very much to the point. The writer has really captured the essence of the situation and has not added any extra "lace". This story really comes forward with those feelings I sometimes get when I read forced crossdressing stories - the anger against totally unfair mothers and family. I still like those stories, but it is really nice to read another viewpoint too!

Hugs from Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)



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