sorry but the English was so bad that I did not understand it .....practice your English .

Not good at all. Needs a better command of the english language. But one can only hope this will come with continued practice.

well this story sounds like its been through a online translator and i cant make head or tails of it fail

I did find the ending sort of...forced, as often is the case with forced feminization story's.

as per my previous comments

i stand by my other comments

as short storys go not bad more explanation would be better a lesson taught by 4 girls intresting twist it will teach him not to boast and take the micky out of the females along the beach

The author's nom de plume and the syntax of the story yell "francophone!"  While some readers may become impatient with the idiosyncratic vocabulary (mefiez-vous des faux amis, cher auteur!), I believe that Helene Ciel (charming name) is to be congratulated, rather than censured, for having the courage to write and post a story in her second language.  Bravo!

CZ

This story needs editing for grammar & sentence structure. I don't
think English is the author's native tongue. Ordinarily, I don't
fault writers for this, but in this story it interferes with the
narrative by distracting the reader's attention. Did I like the
story otherwise? I might well have; the theme seemed promising; but
I found I could not continue with it.  Sorry...
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--Pervy