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Tammy's Revenge
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Comment by juliej on 05/28/07 their are a lot of spellig mistakes in this story the basics of the story are fine but it needs a lot more work to bring it up to a good standard i would sugest using a word check system to correct spelling mistakes before putting for others to read Comment by Cindy Barker on 11/12/04 I was not amused by your story. It is apparent that you got bored writing it. The story wiht tom and his mom in hte shop and the girl who wanted to dress like a boy could have been the total gist of the story. A person who wishes to take anothers life because of subjugating circumstances would have been caught. In these times murder is not a walk away deal. I see your story as a culmination of three seperate issues to be dealt with. when one goes out of the way to write about killinng their parents there are real issues pending. In all seriousness, the one flaw was the love tom had for his moma dn then to suddenly have him kill both parents. think your stories out before you write them. do some free thinking and then write. Comment by juliej on 05/07/04 an interesting story well written,a hard lesson learned by tom but especially by bill i feel that this can go very far hopefully more parts to this story will be added many thanks Comment by Tanya Lynn on 02/16/04 i read all of the other comments and came to the conclusion that some of these people dont live in the real world. i understand the motivations just fine. I truly hope that the bitterness isnt auto-biographical, though. If it is, girl, u definitely have issues to deal with. but, dont be afraid to write something that is out of the mainstream. There are too many "happy" stories on this site as it is. Comment by Ashley on 02/10/04 Just like the others - I loved the first part and couldn't wait to find out what would happen with Jen and Bill - BUT... you ruined it when the character went nuts at the end. "... and never looked back!" WHY NOT???? Comment by Susan Pauline Bauer on 02/10/04 This could have been a great story. Two cross-dressers that happen to meet. There are a lot of typos and spelling errors but this is your first story. I see no reason for killing to be rewarded. So many possibilities not used. How would Tammy and Jen be treated in school? I'd like to see another story by you but think it through first. Comment by a reader on 02/09/04 I liked nothing about the story, at first, and through most of the story, the main character seems to be willing to make sacrifices to help his moms business, then suddenly he thinks he should kill her, whats with that? What she did was bad, but in no way did she deserve to die because of it. Also, she could have easily killed someone elsem since she didn't have any breaks. And why on earth kill the father? He may be a bastard for running off, but lots of people do that, it may be selfish, but nowhere nere bad enough to kill him over it. Comment by Angel O'Hare on 02/09/04 For a very first effort this is an ok story. Just ok because of all the typos and misdirection your story took. Comment by emmie on 02/09/04 Don't trust spellcheck! There are two glaring misspellings in the last paragraph alone-- at least, I *think* you didn't mean to say that Tom went of to "collage" after he "loved with his parents" for a few years. Comment by Cyndi on 02/09/04 What an awful story Comment by Wish I were a donut on 02/09/04 Like the story until the guy goes crazy. The title did tell it all but still I didn't like that unhappy ending. I don't read TG fiction for pain and sorrow but to get my "not a donut" hard. Comment by Pervette on 02/08/04 Pretty grim. It's as if the story turned into a different story Comment by Francine on 02/08/04 Hi Cindi Comment by Annie O on 02/08/04 Sorry to disappoint. Comment by Sandy on 02/08/04 Hi, Comment by Sandy on 02/08/04 Hi, Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 02/08/04 Wow! Standard story up through chapter 7, then makes a 180o Comment by Just a reader on 02/07/04 I agree it started off fine and then seemed rushed. Please be more careful next time the many typos made it hard to read and took the edge off for me Comment by GFriday on 02/07/04 You know, normally I like stories where the guys are convinced to go along happily and voluntarily feminine. That said, I REALLY like this change of pace! People complain on TG fiction sites that too often the guy is forced, meekly goes along and doesn't put up a fight. While I think it would have been nice to explore his relations with the girl he met a bit more, this desperate breakout from the forced-fem role is very effectively handled. It's the kind of departure I wish there were more of. A feminized male who dreams of a boyfriend, etc. is not often realistic. That someone could be pushed over the edge this way is not out of the realm of possibility. This is a terrific story. Keep breaking the stereotypes and coming up with new, novel ideas! |
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