Don't leave me hanging here will you apart from getting me so excited by the brilliant story line it was the sheer uniqueness of it and as a first chapter as I am sure you are aware a long way to go. A tip though to get the story proof read first. But its a great start and well done  look forward to the next chapter.

A quintessential office romance; a story that represents the sterile, lifeless corporate office environment better than this one does, I have yet to see. Everything is rectangular: rectangular offices; rectangular filing cabinets, file boxes and file folders; rectangular apartments; rectangular automobiles; and rectangular boxes for the rectangular lives of the rectangular characters. The characters themselves are cardboard cutouts with computer printout overlays, and speak in an appropriately stilted dialogue that is also computer generated, complete with the name of the person being addressed being spoken each time, for database-like clarity.

Everything in this story is perfect. There is not one stray hair, nor one speck of makeup, out of place. There is not one speck of dirt anywhere, not even at the jazz concert, which is held outdoors at a park. Everything is perfectly civilized, and perfectly lifeless. Individuality and personality is expressed in the different keystroke rhythms our two main characters employ at the data entry keyboard, and enthusiasm over the ability to fit into yet another box: getting the artificially alloted workload done in the artificially allotted amount of time.

Matt (a good descriptive name for his low-gloss character) is also perfect, as the perfect gentleman. The only time he shows an emotion that may be out of character is when he stiffens for a moment the first time Christie cuddles with him, during the concert at the park. This is the only spontaneous emotion that appears in the story -- everything else is veddy veddy proper, most appropriate, and right on cue. During their dates, Christie grips Matt's hands during the gripping parts, and cuddles with him during the cuddly parts. "Goodnight" under the porch light progresses from a hug, to a peck on the cheek, and finally to the full-on goodnight kiss, all in proper sequence. And it is all very chaste, right to the end:

>>We broke apart and I slid my hands from around Matt's neck and down his chest. He loosened his grip from around my waist. Our hands met together and we stood there.

>>"Good night Matt."

>>"Good night Christie."

>>I stepped back and entered the house, shutting and locking the door behind me. I made my way upstairs, thinking about this evening and this past summer.

And, just like that, you know that it is over: temporary woman, temporary job, temporary relationship, temporary romance, temporary life. Temporarily, amazing.

a delightful story with plenty of excitement in the reading.. s/he'd in it with both feet, he knows where she lives and the phone of course. S/he can't just disappear can s/he .. s/he is so taken with him that the story should continue. Tis stories like this that bring me back for more.  I do wonder why there is not another, writers block, more pressing things in your life?  

Thank you for the view from your minds eye... it is precious indeed

a delightful story with plenty of excitement in the eading.. s/he'd in it with both feet, he knows where she lives and the phone of course. S/he can't just disappear can s/he .. s/he is so taken with him that the story should continue. Tis stories like this that bring me back for more.  I do wonder why there is not another, writers block, more pressing things in your life?  

Thank you for the view from your minds eye... it is precious indeed

Really pleasant story; other than that, I don't have a whole lot to add to the comments below.  Like some of the others who made comments, I sort of wondered why you created the tension in having Christie know Matt if there wasn't going to be a payoff at some point.  (And I was more than curious for a while as to just how many years Christie was shaving off her real age in claiming to be in the same school class as Matt -- but assuming the high school was Robert's first teaching job, it was probably five or six, not quite out of realistic range.)

Nice Story. Well written.  Well thought out.  Contained just enough conflict to draw the reader in but not upset the storyline.  You have a good talent for such a sweet presentation. I too was thinking Matt was going "bust her" in the closing lines.  Thanx for sharing with us

Good story, only problem I see is that the main characters addressed Debra in a bit unnatural way. Every sentance directed at her started with her name, which is rather unrealistic, at least nobody I know would do that in a chat.

Impossible to think of any way this story could be improved. The
avoidance of the obvious was masterly.
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--Pervette

A very well written and likable story. I must admit I thought the ending would have been different.

Love Karen.

For the second time in two days I find myself liking one of Jezzi's endings!
I really enjoyed the story and, whilst I respect the view that there are loose ends left, I like being able to use my imagination to work out an epilog.
Thanks for the hard work in writing such a long and enjoyable story.

Great story. Is there going to be a follow up to see if Christie and Matt continue their relationship.
Keep up the good work.

Such a lovely story.

Dear Vicki:

   Fun, light, and totally about being lost in being a woman. I was surprised there was so much actual real work accomplished. Attention to makeup was appreciated, but even so it got a little repetitive. The reality and probability are very high and I would not be surprised to find out this happened somehwere, almost exactly like this.

 It was interesting to see that Christie has a life of her own and her own feelings and even her own identity. It would have been interesting to hear more about that. The internal dynamics could be fascinating. I thought for sure they were going to be hired on permanently or at least offered a job. But yes, the schooling is an excuse and maybe a legal problem if they steal them away from the temp agency. Still almost everyone works a lot even when school is in session. Employees like this are gold and most people don't want them to slip away. Also that would have allowed some more conflict and pressure to the situation.

 I like the story just as it is though, and it was a very enjoyable read.  Thank you so much for sharing a gentle and fuzzy tale that tickles our fancies.

Hugs,

Kristi

sweet imaginitive and realistic story and warms one heart to read.

Very nice, realistic story; I several times forgot that I was reading a TG story.  I did think the ending was bland and left too many loose ends.  I thought right up to the end that the last sentence was going to be something like Matt saying, " Have a good school year, Mr. Lindstrom."

This is a nice, tasteful, well-written story. I do feel that Christie is being a bit cruel to Matt though, given that she's going to revert to her other self at the end of the summer.

This is a pretty long story, and it might have done well to be edited more in places, though only for length. The writing is first-rate.  Also I liked the fact that the end was left to the imagination.  No poke in the poop-chute cliche like many might have expected.