hey,, you all,,,I like the story,,but,,you did not have diapers in the story and i hope you will put part 2 and 3 & 4,,and please put in diapers in your stories,, why you said you have diapers in the first one,,but,,there not any at all,,,,,,,,,

I'm sorry katie, but I don't like anything forced, and his mother deceived him. He is simply a eight years kid.
I think she is very wrong with her son.
An affectionate mother wouldn't do this to her child.
I'm sorry, but this is what I think.
Kisses.
Silvia.

wow verry good got anny more and did you add to this story ?love awalys whildchild

this is a good story it has the righ atmoshere and backround the way he got dressed after only a small argument means he was itching to try girls clothing it would not have been long beforehe would try himself curiosity killed the cat is a saying i remember

really wish you would write more {even though "Two Weeks" is a short time (long time for little boy) many things could happen..............

Hello Katie:

  Those Are The Breaks is a simply delicious story. I really, really wish you would write more. What a beautiful premise and a fortuitous situation for Sam. I also think it is cute that Jenny still thinks of him as a boyfriend even though he will be in girls clothes for at least two weeks.  

   There really isn't anything to change. I wouldn't be at all surprised if you do get other works published in the open market. You are very good. Thank you so much for sharing.

Hugs,

Kristi

its a very good start to what could be a great story its moving well and not to fast good writing

Hi Katie,
I like the way you started this story.
Is there any chance that you you will continue it?
Hugs, Fran

I enjoyed the first chapter, please continue the story.

A Reader

Katie? You've done it again. This first part was just so adorably sweet. I simply loved it. Waiting for the next installment.

Barbara Lynn Terry

Love your writing.  I would recommend that your create a complete story outline.  There is flexibility in outlines which allows one to perhaps adopt suggestions from your fan's.  It's main value, is that omissions, lost theme threads, or inconsistencies, really stand out, ready to be addressed.  When winging it, things can get confused or lost. It is hard for us to identify with the terror and embarrassment that we all have felt when someone found us out or used dressing as a punishment, if there is not much fear and of course embarrassment in the story.  In actuality, when dealing with forced dressing, there is no such a thing as a "light story."  I would like to taste the emotional range from fear to happiness that you are capable of.  
Very glad you are back.  Hope your life is filled with some peace and happiness.  Be good to yourself.

Katie: Nice story! Just stay away from boy becomes girl, boy/girl wants boy, boy/girl becomes boy toy.
  I agree that the boy does seem to change from start to chapter's end, altho it may just be a way of his rebelling at Jennie's presence.
  A gentle push for the two to be friends, sleep together -- like sisters -- and a budding love affair building up between the two would be nice.
  A separation for a time with the boy admitting to himself "Gosh, I miss Jennie so-o-o much" would also be good. A description of a scene in a girl's clothing store, maybe, with the boy feeling all the soft satins and nylon items. There's lots of openings here.

Hi katie, I'm looking forward to part 2, but here are some observations that I hope come across as constructive.

think, unless you add a surprise major twist in part 2, that you've set this up to be a pretty predictable enjoyable slide into girlhood for Sam.  You've already set him up as extremely curious about what it would be like to be a girl and thinking it would probably be nice.  You've already set him up with  a 180o mental turn in his feelings for Jenny.   We know, in fact, that he wants this.  I think it would have been better if you had left all this foreshadowing out and had him promise out of remorse/guilt to do anything, but be totally surprised, shocked, and appalled  when being a girl for two weeks is the "anything", never having had any transgender thoughts or really liking Jenny thoughts before.  Only his sense of honor makes him very reluctantly go along with the plan.  It would give you a lot more options for how to take the story in part two and be a lot less predictable for readers.    

Also, you seem to be writing about two different boys:  In the beginning, we have a boy who wouldn't put his toys away, argued with his mom, etc., and just threw them "roughly" in the trunk when he finally complied.  At the end we have a  boy who "meticulously" followed his evening routine and  made sure he dried off in the shower so he wouldn't make a mess.   If his mom had brought him up to automatically do the latter, I don't think he would have done the former.

And maybe two different moms.  It seems to me that this is really all Mandy the mom's  fault for pushing Jenny on Sam without warning.  She had to have a pretty good idea about how he felt and the mood he was in.  She deliberately sends Jenny upstairs knowing she "never lets the POOR boy alone."  It almost feels as if she's thinking, "I'll punish Sam by sending Jenny up."  She should have realized that she was creating the conditions for just exactly what happened or something very like it.  The mom who came up with the secret agent ploy at the end to get what she wanted from a reluctant son, I think, would have  used that same sneakiness to get a reluctant son to play nice with Jenny in the first place.

I really liked the title pun.

This is a very nicly written story that tells how most in the male species get to know little girls. Now I nver broke anybodys arm but it did find girls at a young age. Which may be why I crossdress now. Glad to see you got past your writers block and are back writing happier stories, then what happened to you as a child. I want to read the rest of this story.