Enjoyed this story also. I am glad to read about a normal woman's day and all that it can entail. Having to deal with three small children, plus all the additional issues that arise is just in itself enough to cause you to go over the edge on a given day. It is was indeed a lesson learning experience for Bill, however, I wonder if he really did learn anything if he has to remain Jessica forever. He could have used his newly acquired knowledge to become a much better and forgiving person and both he and Jessica could have continued their own lives. Perhaps a followup story where they do get to relive their own lives. Thanks tho for a neat story. J-Lynn  

I liked the subject.  In fact it's funny looking at my life.  I've been married almost 10 years, have a 3yr 4yr and 9 year old.  My wife has been on deployment and due to return this week.  Basically I've done everything "Mr. Mom" for our kids because I'm the one who works from home.  My point, you hit the nail on the head for details and stress.  On a sad note in the story "mom" missed out on raising "her" children even if she was in Paradise.  Everyone should have returned, having learned a lesson.

Wonderful, and as real as it gets for a woman. Please continue to write more of such - it is great to read what reality looks like for a woman which is not just sex and sweetness, but a challenge to find
those amidst daily challenges and tussles.
You captured and kindled feminine feelings superbly.
Love
-Lisa

I liked the story. My only problem is that in the end it seems that Jessica is the one who gets punished. She loses her life her children and what sounds like a loving husband. To punish Bill Karana killed Jessica. I dont think Jessica would want that.

Allie

Nicely written story. I hate drivers who cut you off and then slow down to 'punish' you. I don't htink it was fair for the orginal Jessica to lose her life & her kids like that. Perhaps she could have got his body & become the husband? Anyway you did leave hanging what happened to him. Very good details & the story comes alive.

What a well written, thought envoking piece. You're insights are very accurate. I enjoyed it.

I liked the fact that it was a pretty accurate description of a young mother's day - no bimbo, no sex, etc.  I thought Bill's change at the end to loving everything and waiting eagerly for the guy and sex was way too abrupt unless an identity death took place.  

Karana seemed to me a little like the SRU Wizard, not really impressing on him the seriousness of following the directions exactly, or telling him the consequences if he didn't; I think she wanted the outcome that occured.  Maybe Jessica was close to breaking and Karana was saving her from committing suicide or something.

I wondered what happened to Bill's body?  When Bill botched his return, did reality change so that he never existed or was he just found dead?

Your stories just keep getting better and better. This one makes me think of what the  vengence demons like seen in Buffy Vampire Slayer series would of done to that guy.

Hi. I liked your story. It was irresponsible that he drove wrecklessly, but she was dangerous when she drove with her knees too. She should never do that.

I liked where you went with the story to the extent that he became an ordinary woman with ordinary problems instead of a sex kitten. I would like to know what happened to his old body, and the original woman. Did she die? Become him? Or what?

I also would have liked for him to be changed back. It would have been interesting to see if being a woman would make him a better man.