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Trapped in a Box
by Peg Thebois

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Comment by Lee on 12/19/12
Sandy did what every woman that has gone into every store in the mall, try on half of the clothes in the place then buy nothing at all.

What gives the flooseys in this story the right to vindictive actions against him just because he is male.

While this might be the writers fantasy I can't believe I read the whole thing

Lee


Comment by Silvia. on 04/06/10
What a bad and sad story you wrote.
I'm very sorry for you!
Bad story............
Silvia.

Comment by tim naismith on 06/22/06
and  all the men i know or ever knew keeps there wallet in there pants

Comment by tim naismith on 06/22/06
i live in edmonton and can see something like that happening,and i thought it was a GREAT storie

Comment by Peg_Thebois on 04/03/03
Nellie D, interesting take on what would have happened except for one thing, I can't speak for everyone but most guys I know carry their wallet in their jacket, not in their pants pocket, most often in an inside pocket of their jacket at that.  Allow me quote from the story itself,
"if he had money he could buy a pair of pants, even if they were girls pants they had to be better than what he had on right now. However he made a point to do these "shopping trips" when he had no money so that he could be sure that his bank card would not work, leaving him stuck buying something he may not actually want."
So it is really by his own actions combined with those of the disgruntled salesgirls that Sandy is undone.

Comment by Nellie D on 04/03/03
Well the writing wasn't too bad,i.e. fairly good. The story overall was fair. The women were a little on the cruel side, possibly harming him mentally for a long time. And the security woman takes the tape home to get off on but doesn't come to his aid. This is the author's fantasy so it is as it is.

Let's look at this from a more true life side. His bus ticket or fare was in his pants along with his ID. He starts walking and/or hitchhiking to his apartment and along the way he is beaten to within inches of his life. Then he is left to die by the attacker, only a passing motorist notices and calls for medical attention. Now he is in the hospital in serious condition; all because some people didn't like his taking up a little time.



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