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Triumph of My Will
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Comment by Miss Fitt on 11/01/16
Well, what did happen to the sisters ? Interesting story, pity that it wasn't edited, it certainly needed it. Comment by high quality backlinks on 07/18/14 zEAJsu Im obliged for the article.Really thank you! Keep writing. Comment by jasmine on 07/26/08 Jane marie, Reading what I wrote four years later, I dont think it is that good. It does pretty much suck. But it wasnt a waist of my time and effort to write. That is how we learn to write better. by writing story's that suck. I think all of the best writers, at first wrote crappy story's until they learned the trade. Comment by Dianna on 03/16/08 Suddenly the idea of forcibly feminizing someone has lost some of it's appeal hasn't it? I loved how this ended. Hate can sustain you, through years of abuse and ridicule, hate grows stronger and festers until it changes the victim. Changes them into something much darker, into a twisted parody of who they could have been. Comment by juliej on 07/20/07 a brilliant storythe way it was constucted nothing boring about a few spelling mistakes but a brilliant story well done Comment by Jana Marie on 06/04/07 Pure garbage from start to finish. Waste of writers time and effort. No need for further episodes. Comment by julie j on 07/22/05 I have finally read the last part of this story its brilliant well written and described it kept me on my toes well done geat story more please Comment by Jane Hudson on 08/01/04 I have read on Fictionmaina part 4 and Rise to power as well.Oh boy darker and darker it gets .This is TG storys with real bite like a TG great white. More about this 21 century TG well girls wait and see it worth it unless you read them on fictionmania already. Go for it this is different come to the darkside of TG Luke!! Comment by juliej on 07/16/04 a vicous circle with sister rulling the roost the story is very hard hitting story of their treatment i was enthralled with the first 2 parts and look foreward to reading the next in due course what can i say but brilliant very well written and explained there is great scope for this story the revenge on the driver/security and the court appearance well done i am on tender hooks until i read the other parts and the conclusion brilliant writing next parts asap please wonderfull marks out of 100 i would say 150 plus brilliant so far please write the rest asap thankyou again a great story well done Comment by Jane Hudson. on 06/29/04 Pansy dear what would happen is that one of the girls would end up being knived or something you have to sleep you know and hate can carry you a long way.I was bullied at first at school then when the hate kicked in no one could beat me because I always came back at them in the end no one messed with me.I was hated at school but left alone force may not be right but it sure works I know! wish it did not have to be like that. This story is very dark but some time life is dark .When I was at sea I saw some horrid things.That why cockroaches will be the owners of the world a 100 years from now if we dont wise up which we wont because man is a being who write on the pages of history in blood. I think this story is going to go to very dark and deep places will the reader be able to walk that dark road with the writer we shall see! Comment by Kay on 06/28/04 Mixed up confusion. If this is from a 12 yr old's perspective, it certainly isn't written that way. If this kid is such a fighter, why is he manipulated to the extent he is. Also, the main character is no better than the other characters. Someone has to be likable in this story. I would ask you to stop while you are ahead; however!!! Comment by budget blonde on 06/25/04 A martial arts expert would probably take down the first sister with a blow to the laranyx.she cant cry out....next sister broken knee and take her down so she can be delt with later..slowly...third(biggest) sister, butcher knife, table leg, othe sharp or blunt instrument to the neck or head...if your lucky she would be ready for fun and games later...The state department didnt question him in europe without a passport? the school authorities dont question one student assaulted and paralyzed while another dissapears? can a judge dismiss with predjudice a criminal complaint? They can a civil suit, but criminal? Comment by Annabel on 06/25/04 I found this hard work. It must have been even harder work to write. Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 05/08/04 (after the revision) Comment by Slothrop on 04/08/04 I find the title intriguing. The parallels you are drawing to the third reich have some interesting potential. Comment by Pervette on 04/07/04 I've been thinking some more about this story. How could it be turned around? Michael doesn't seem to have enough spunk to take action himself; he's too terrified by the girls. The hairdresser is a possibility, though; she obviously smells a rat, & she just might go to the authorities & ask them to investigate. Michael could still be intimidated into telling the social workers he's willing, but in real life social workers have been known to take a feminized boy away even when he really *is* willing. Comment by Pervette on 04/06/04 Have I told you lately I love you, Jezzi? :-) I hadn't thought of Comment by mikie on 04/06/04 This looks to be a story one either likes or dislikes. I, for one, enjoy what you have started, Jasmine. I encourage you to keep it going. Comment by Angel O'Hare on 04/06/04 Well, this attempt at a story is atracting the people you intended isn't it? I mean, did you really intend to write this so people like 'Pansy' can get off on it? Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 04/06/04 Wow do they have him psyched, but how will the sick little sadistic bitches feel when they're bleeding to death from the gunshot wounds when he finally goes postal. I really hope that beautician calls the police or social services, and they lock those feminazi sisters away for child abuse. So much for women being the morally superior sex. Comment by Pansy on 04/06/04 Oh, please continue. I'd love to see him made into the prettiest swishiest little sissy ever. I hope he hates it. I'd love to see him crying intensely. Sissies are prettiest when they're crying. Especially when being used sexually. I love the idea that other kids are afraid of him, that he could bully them if he chose, but his sisters can bully him. It's a fascinating twist. A boy who's feminized and humiliated against his will despite the fact that he's big and strong. It shows there is NO defense against determined dominant females. |
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