I couln't fault it.  Absolutely magnifent.  I was gripped by it and kept coming back to it.  More from you please!

Well done Marty,
Pacy and full of excitement. Great depth to the Paras and characters were well drawn especially Shannon. Girls will be boys and boys will be girls what a mixed up shook up world-great fun. Thanks for the story.
Cheers
Jay

Hi.
This is a nice story, but you use sex in excess.
It doesn't need so many sex in order that the story is good.
But I liked your story. Good story, but the only down side, was the excess of sex.
Kisses.
Silvia.

Great story!  I was not so interested in the hot sex though but the story was really good.
There was a few scenes though that did seem somewhat out of place.

You seem very well informed about the Paras it seems.

The story was written well enough to keep my interest all the way to the end.

Many parts seemed quite believable which is why I kept reading.

Lots of cum-slurping, backside-buggering sex, explicitly and graphically described (not really my "thing"), which definitely rates it an XXX. The rape scenes in Alexandria, Egypt are very I(ntense). Having the main character "make it" with his SAS teammates was a little bit too much disbelief for me to suspend; like Yoron, I had trouble with part 4. However, the main character and plot carried me to the end. I would not agree with Geoff that the early part of the story could easily be cut: where it did not move the plot along, it contributed to character development, which is what held my interest through the later parts of the story that otherwise might have lost me. I thought that several other characters were also well developed, so that the story retained a human feeling for me.

Sorry mate, you lost me in chapter 4.
It would have been cooler id you kept the professionalism going.

Like what you had in the two first chapters.
Any elite soldiers losing their focus like those jokers would only be...
SAS? Better take a hike here mate :)

But those first chapters was good.

Yoron.

Awh :)

You give a whole new dimension to being in the SAS

Very kissable I must say.
Could this be 'Hearts and Minds' in a new dress sort of?
Chapter 2 and still reading

Yoron

A good story, well researched it seems to me.
As for your knowledge of the SAS I will leave unsaid.
But you definitely seem to know the army, paras and their 'hobbies'.

I like your story, there is a sense of wonder and excitement to it.
Just like a recruitment poster should be :)

And I'm just at part 01 as for yet :)
So sign me up for the trip.

Cheers
Yoron

GREAT STORY, A GOOD READ, I THOUGHT PART 4 COULD HAVE BEEN BETTER HANDLED BUT I'M NOT AN AUTHOR!
I'LL LOOK FORWARD TO LOTS MORE OF YOUR STORIES.
GOOD LUCK
RITA

Good story

Very gripping and engaging, makes you want to read all the episodes one after the other, so the plot is well-constructed.

The operational details are quite good but a little
out of date, tactical doctrine and weaponry have changed, but the
army life and culture have been captured and painted well.
Certainly they add to the "authenticity" of the story.

The sex scenes are also well done !!

Look forward to reading more from you.

Nice story Marti Darling,but a grave error in it.  Mulsim men are all circumcised, so foreplay with foreskin pulling is impossible !

Know the Enemy !

<giggle>

great story, it was long but kept me entertained all the way through. as has been mentioned an occasional typo/mispelling, but nothing to detract from the story to any great degree. please carry on writing, as you have a talent that seems to be improving story by story. again, thanks
 maurice

A grand story, the relationships well explored.  

Thank you for the view from your mind's eye.

Congratulations on writing such a huge and entertaining piece.  A truly admirable effort.

I read it all more or less at one sitting and enjoyed it all. I know little about the SAS (I haven't read any of McNab's books) but all the detail and the operational background were very convincing.  If there is any fault, I think a lot of the early life and training narrative, whilst enjoyable in itself, didn't really add to the main story or move the plot along and could be easily cut. You could save it for another story, perhaps.  Particularly the episode in Ballymena :).

Apart from the odd spelling error ('fallow' for 'follow', keeps repeating for some reason, and won't show up with a spell check) and occasionally over long paragraphs the whole thing reads well.  Perhaps you should enlist an editor/proof reader.  It's so easy to be blind to faults in stuff you've spent many hours writing ... and I can only imagine the number of hours 'Trooper Blondie' must have taken.

Many, many thanks for your efforts.

Hi.

This is a nice piece of writing. I liked the pace and energy of this, you managed to bring a sense of excitement and danger.

The only down side for me was the sex. I must admit that I read for the pleasure of the story, rather than the sexual content, so I skimmed over the various sex scenes.

This story shows a marked expansion of your writing talents from those that I have seen by you before, and I now look forward to your future efforts.

Natasha