So where is the corseting bit? Nice start BUT - - - - - - - - -

Nice start I hope you will continue your writing career and I believe you have a great career ahead I hope you will finish this story and others

Hi, first let me tell you, its a cute story, and so what if theres a pretty feminine apron in the story, maybe there should be more storys with aprons in them, besides beinging worn with maids uniforms, maybe more xdressers should check out vintage aprons on e-bey and buy a couple and wear them. A pretty does make you feel more feminine, try it some time, thank you cindy

disappointed, i had nbeen expecting more!

Good start, but not really a story yet.

This is such a promising sweet story with a great potential.

I sure do hope you have more for us in mind.

Hugs!

fast going but worth continuing

Dear Danielle,
  This of course is the favorite fantasy wish of all of us gender- gifted males. An epiphany to be sure to discover that the person you should appreciate the most in the world in a hard working and ever loving wife.  That supporting her bread-winning role was only ethical and correct.  But the apron!  Ah!  Now there's the rub!  Why wear a woman's apron?  "Well after all it was the only one available and I had to protect my good pants and shirt- did I not? And besides- we both had a good laugh about it!"  Heh- heh- heh!  GREAT START!
Thank you for writing it and sharing it
Hugs
Mandee

I love how you've begun your story. It seems very promising and I do hope you'll put some more up soon.

A very nice "start". Who cares about paragraphs. As Danielle and Teddie said, "Please give us bigger chunks."

Yes.  A very nice start.  But, you need to break it into paragraphs.  It will make it easier to read.  And, as Danielle said, "Please give us bigger chunks."

This story is so good, I was just getting into it when it ended.
So far it has great promise. I can't wait to see how the author completes this tale.

Great start.  I liked the humorous touch towards the end.
Please don't think of this as adverse criticism of your work, but I think I would have found it easier to read if you had put in a few more paragraphs - I appreciate the instructions when posting stories discourage writers from using too many carriage returns.
I enjoyed the story and I liked your style of writing and I'm looking forward to more.
Hugs, Annabel

Danielle

Very nice start but so short. Please give us bigger chunks. Looks like this could be a real love story, between two very nice people,  please give us more.

Hugs,

Kristi