Very, very bad story.
He was betrayed by his own sister, and blackmailed by his sister's friend.
Very bad story.
Silvia.

Shame there has been no part 4.  This was a really fun story to read and except for Mom and Dad not detecting the difference, more believable than many.  Tracey needs to keep going, nicely done!

good story so far need to reread

Part three.
Typos refered to were not much of a problem for me but different strokes for different folks.
Will be interesting to see if and how Lisa reacts when and if she finds out.  Lets hope no accidents occuerd with Sara. Might ruin everything for many.
Loved the works as a whole, Golly would like to be in the middle of
something like that.

Great story!! Keep it going, please!

Small typo:  at the end of part 3, I think you mean that they all go to Sarah's house, not Lisa's as you wrote.

I enjoyed parts 1 & 2, but then part 3 just turned into a sexfest

Awfully explicit for "R"...

wonderful well described story

Very nice -- and you keep the story moving well.  I enjoy the twists that have come up, and am looking forward to his/her trip abroad as a broad!

This is a nice story with some good elements.  However, the parents would have known that it was their son and not their daughter they were talking with.  I don't care how much brother and sister looked like each other.  I had identical twin brothers (real twins as both were the same sex) and I never had any trouble telling which brother was which.  When you live with someone on a day to day basis, you know that person.  You might be able to fool your friends, but not Mum and Dad.

clairs twin is in for alot of trouble. after the trip when it's time for wedding. i wonder what else she forgot to tell him about.

Hi Tracey  :)
I enjoy this story line, please continue.
Hugs, Fran

This is a wonderful star, and Tracey's comments that it's a teaser only make me eagerly anxious for the next part.

I know this is short but is meant as just a little teaser. Part 2 is underway and will be much longer.  keep the feed back coming It makes the work worthwhile xx

Delightful start but do write much, much more.  This piece is a delightful 'tease' that really must go on.
Mardee

I agree with Angel about how short this first segment is.  But that said, I have to comment that I love these "twin" stories and you are off to one fantastic start.  The proofreading goes with the territory but I really look forward to a longer Part 2!

AX

good start better than some i've read. i'm looking forword to seeing what happens next. i wonder if clair knew about this before asking her brother.

MORE-MORE-MORE!!!!

Hi Tracy,

Great first effort and looking forward to what comes next. A few suggestions for you if I may.

1) Before submitting your story proof it once and then proof it again. Those little annoying typos will be caught by you then.

2) Try to make your submissions at least 10K. Your present 6K size is a little short. Readers like to have at least a 10K size story to read especially if it is a serial or multipart story.

Once again let me say a terrific start! I looke forward to reading more from you.

Huggles
Angel

to short