ldPheB Really informative article.Much thanks again. Keep writing.

what  a great  fun story  !!!!  I enjoyed  it  thanks  !!!!  

Quite an unusual story, but entertaining. It is now 10 years on and where is the sequel?

Of course the story could have been made longer with a lot more details as some readers have commented, but it is now a nice, light story made for quick, easy reading.  A great story.

Getting Jake's ears pierced adds an intersting twist, particularly since Mary does not have her ears pierced.  Jake will have to wear his earrings all the time, day and night, until his ears heal.  Will he reamin a girl all this time, or will he become a boy whose ears are pierced?  What about Mary?  Will she now get her ears pierced so they can continue to change identities?  Will she have to remain in boy mode until Jake's ears heal and he can swith out of girl mode?  There are a lot of possibilities for future chapters here.

Hi sweetie. Loved the story, very well written, I wish it had been me, especially the school uniform, and the aerobics leotard and tights part. But, I think it went too fast,  as it was the first time 'out-dressed' for Joanne, a boy/girl in puberty, there was nothing mentioned about any voice control practice, considering he/she met up with and spoke to several total strangers to him/her. Anyway, as I've already said, I loved the story line and would like you to continue. To find out how it ends up.        Kind regards, Vicki xx

Very nice story!  I agree the makeover could have been more detailed and more fun!  Also perhaps trying on a few more outfits in the store.  Very nice story though with a wonderful ending!

Lisa

What a nice sweet story.  It's fine as is, but would also be fine fleshed out.  I would have liked a more detailed salon scene with Jake, and I also think that the ear piercing was a bit unrealistic given that the parents and grandparents knew the true situation.

This is such a sweet well-constructed story.  As a parent myself, I think eleven years old is the perfect age for the twins.  And the twist at the end is perfect.  
Certainly the story could have been fleshed out with graphic details of the ballet class or at school.  I think it is perfectly fine to have a short story as exactly that - a short story.

I enjoyed this story so much.I think that it's cute how they've gotten in over their heads with their little joke.Please do continue writing stories like this one.

SUCH A WONDERFUL STORY. I KIND OF THOUGHT THAT THE PARENTS WERE NOT SO DUMB AS TO NOT KNOW WHO WAS WHO, EVEN WITH IDENTICAL TWINS THERE IS THAT INSTINCT. AMANDA, GIVE US MORE LIKE THIS. PLEASE.

I wish I would have had an identical or fraternal twin when I was younger. As it was I had to wait until I was eighteen to start my transition which was completed when I was twenty one because the doctor kept hemming and hawing. But, this story is great and my parents were never that understanding.

Barb

 Eleven year olds?  I think not

The story is a nice idea, but needs to be fleshed out. The story is skeletal at present. The scene is clearly set in Britain with the references to Harry Ramsden Fish and Chip shop etc. - this could be enlarged to make it distinct from so many of the stories that are very American. There can also be one or two near misses for discovery by people in the shops.

Clearly there is an opening for developing the story further with the trip to the States. Are you still interested in taking the story further, because it has potential.

Snowdrift