very good story. a lot better of some other storys i've read. where the life is having sex with half of the men in town and change her husband sex so she can carry on. leaving him/her stuck doing what she was doing. that end was great and it is true. you don't know what you loved most in your life until you lose it. a leason hard learnt.

I have to disagree with a lot of what is being said. Particularly one comment about "He would just forgive his wife for her infidelity". >.<
By that logic a lot of the stories on this site just had their basic conflict removed because the Female (the one slighted) should've just forgiven her boyfriend/fiance/husband for his infidelity instead of transforming them.

So that's either a case of hypocrissy or...

at any rate, I did enjoy the story, there were a few unnecessary plot devices (the cancer for example) and I don't think that David needed to bemoan him/herself quite so much.

But I found the ending fairly satisfying. ^^

I love your work Danielle, it's a wonderful contrast to the feminazi propaganda spat out by authors like Shy and Jennifer White.

The plot could be carried out a long way to make a delightful story. Try doing it!

MANY QUESTIONS REMAIN, BUT THE STORY WAS VERY GOOD AND EASILY UNDER-
STANDABLE. THE PLOT WAS GOOD AND THE REVENGE ON BETTY WAS SWEET. THE
ONLY LOSER WAS LISE WHO IS THE REAL VICTIM.

a hard story to understand but it was enjoyable in thewhole

I agree with most of the other comments that David was to ready to bed Ralph, had Ralph planned his op? sounds like this area could be exploited. Lise was the victim and Betty deserved a more appropriate exit. The ending was not satisfactory.
But some very good ideas which could be exploited for a better story?

On one hand, it's good to see a 'bimbofication' turned against the victimizer. On the other hand, I have to agree on the general consensus- the very drastic decisions were made too quickly, easily and regretlessly for a relationship that had been without serious conflict for 18 years. A few regrets, a few second thoughts, and a care for the social consquences should have been in order

Also, the narrative sort of all flowed together. It all seemed to happen at once. It was obviously a fantasy put down on paper, but still, a little more effort would be appreciated

While I enjoyed this story, I must agree with the other reviewers.  If David/Danielle really loved his wife of 18 years, he would have forgiven her infidelity that was obviously caused by the drugs injected by Betty.

And what was the purpose of the testicular cancer story?  Just to have David infused with estrogen and testerone blockers?  Betty took care of that all by herself.

Maybe the story would have made more sense if there was more time between the surgery and Betty's intervention.  Whereupon David would have been more predisposed to adopting the femie persona of Danielle.  

This was a good story, but it read like an early draft.  It could have been even better with a rewrite, better editing and a different ending.

I'm sorry, but I have to agree with Jezzi on this one. The only character I had any sympathy for was Lise. She was thoroughly screwed by Betty AND "it's all about me" David who constantly boasts about what a wonderful person and husband he is, even as he's callously dicarding his supposedly loved wife as stupid and unfaithful on the basis of events over which she had no control. In fact it's hard to decide who's more repulsive, Betty or David, and it's certainly hard to care what happens to either of them.

On a more technical note, this story is a bit hard to read and difficult to follow, because the text and dialogue are allowed to run together in the paragraphs. More conventional formatting would have made things easier.

Nice girls finish last.  The only likeable character in this story turns out to be Lise.  David is the real jerk here.  why is he blaming Lise?  He SAW Betty give her what I assume was the date rape drug.  Lise had no more choice than he did, and he is ranting at her about not caring?  Then he very callously dumps her for Ralph.  Even if he the changes Betty made left no love, she didn't deserve the treatment  she got from him.  And why does Lise feel like it's her fault at the end?  She states earlier that she knows she was drugged by Betty.  Too many inconsitencies in this story.  And if Ralph were a true friend, he'd try to undo the brainwashing instead of taking advantage of his friend.