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Undercover Secretary 2
by Alana

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Comment by elane on 10/24/16
alane please don't take any notice of any one saying things about you  your dress and makeup are wonderfull I would love to meet you any  time  for nice chat love elain2
Comment by Ruby on 07/05/07
The perfect "prim and proper" secretary!
Comment by Sky Above on 12/20/05
A very nice follow-up to the first part. I like the way you changed the style to reflect an "interview with the author", and managed to provide ample opportunity for showing off a gorgeous array of outfits!! Of course, you look adorable in every one of them!! No wonder that pig of a boss couldn't keep his hands to himself...
:)
I can't wait to read the rest of your stories.
Sky
Comment by Nanayo on 09/08/05
I was not crazy about the story, but anything that has your picture in it.  I want to see!!!!
Comment by Adrianna on 03/29/05
In all honestly, Alana, I think aside from your obvious tendencies toward exhibitionism, you throw all these pictures on here because your stories aren't all that good and you don't write terribly well.  Don't misunderstand you look great. Your taste in outfits parallels my own.  And I love those force-fem secretary stories.

The problem is that you assume the photos will take attention away from your obvious shortcomings in narrative, characterization (your characters are all cardboard cartoon types).

If I were you I'd forget the pictures and work on improving my writing.


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