Like Jezzi I would liked more involvement in the party activities. But differently: Humiliation in a dress sure, but also just funny games in which he/she could take part without feeling too embarrased. Perhaps with kind enough treatment he would have understood how wrong he had been planning to spoil his sisters party - maybe even apologizeing the girls.

One should remember that Jimmy was Debbie's twin and there must have been a bond between them. I just wonder if Debbie got him to play dressup later on...?

You forgot part 2 where Jimmy waits for his turn for revenge. A few months later he drops in a lot of sleeping pills in the tea pot. When his sisters and mother fell into a deep sleep he gets his revenge by burning off their hair. They never smiled again.

It's much easier to udnesrntad when you put it that way!

Jennifer I love this story. I really enjoy the themes you use, the girls getting revenge on an arrogant boy. I am a big fan of young girls, rather than grown women, taken revenge or just humiliating young boys.
Keep up the awesome work!

I enjoyed the tail but wonder if you’re a little bit quick with the ending.  

After being so abused by the girls why would he capitulate so quickly? Seems that he would fall into a deep depression for a period of time the height of the trauma to a child of 12 could have him refusing to come out of his room even refusing to go to school and actually skipping it. Forced to face these students again in school might have him so upset that he would attempt to get himself suspended from school. The mental anguish that a child could undergo at the thought that pictures could be displayed at any time might push him to try suicide after all he was betrayed by his mother. In addition who swore the girls attending the party to keep silent everyone attending would be want to tell the story ensuring more humiliation when he returned to school or met up with his mates.

You made it a nice easy package but I can’t help but feel the trauma wouldn’t end that night but only get worse with the perpetual teasing of his mates and the student body. Children are cruel and will push any exposed weakness by grinding as much salt into the wound as they can get away with. It takes a strong character to overcome such adversity I don’t know many children the can do that.

Makes you wonder how long before the girls would realize that they had gone past the point of getting even. Why didn’t the mother see the possibilities? Granted she was worried about him being physically hurt why didn’t she consider the possible mental anguish he might go through

JB

 well done good story ..  this showed a punishment that was effictive and not carried out to be excessive .. he learned a lesson and became a better person because of it... thank you for sharing..
rone welles

these stories a brilliant the ay the girls extract revenge is great a lesson learned the hard way thankyou brilliant &very enjoyable

This is a good story, I think, because the punishment fit the crime. He was punished, learned his lesson, hopefully, and that was that!

I like these sisters much, much more because they set out to prevent the lad from getting into really bad trouble later. And, at the end rather than being sent to bed without supper, he got to enjoy a few party goodies.

I'm not really fond of "some" of your stories, mainly because they seem to go too far, i.e., using superglue on wigs, fingerless mittens, etc.

Still, your writing is much better than most "authors."

I thought the petticoat punnishment was very realistic.  While the sisters surely enjoyed the revenge, deep down, they, really did care about their brother, and it was done to teach a lesson.  It fit the crime and was over when it was over.  Had it been over the top cruel and sadistic, like in so many stories of this type, he wouldn't have learned any lesson except hate your sisters or women in general - it would just have either started an escalating cycle of revenge or resulted in harm to him or by him to others.  Good job.

My only question is, where does the story take place and when?  I can't imagine it taking place in the U.S. or in 2007, as I have taught 12 year olds for 37 years and cannot imagine any of the girls I taught voluntarily having or attending a birthday party to which they would wear "party dresses" (the kind with sashes and bows) and have their mothers watching them; almost all would consider such a party as punishment of them.  It sounded more like the kind of party 8 year olds or younger might enjoy.

I also thought it would have been interesting to have made him take part in the party activities, which the sisters probably could have done after they had taken the initial pictures - have him play girl games acting like he enjoyed them or having him be the makeover model or get his nails done, for example ... and all wonderful photo ops, of course  :-)    

Jennifer:  Maybe I'm barking up a wrong tree here -- this admittedly isn't the kind of story I get into -- but it seems to me you need to demonstrate greater confidence in your descriptive ability.  You can (and for the most part, do) SHOW that your main character is feeling humiliated and uncomfortable, without having to insert a sentence or paragraph saying so (and in virtually the same words) every time something happens.  The extra paragraphs slow the story down, IMO.

I'm sort of torn on the other point.  You've made a great effort -- in marked contrast to most stories of this nature -- to prevent your young ladies from doing any physical harm to the boy, and to let him know that he's being given a clean slate from here on in, the embarrassing pictures notwithstanding.  I'm glad you've done that.  On the other hand, that makes things awfully repetitive at the party, since there's very little, having teased the guy already, that they can do to him after mealtime except tease him again.

Hope my comments are helpful.

Eric