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What Really Happened Was...
by Donna Dee

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Comment by Nancy Richard on 06/10/06
Where can I get in contact with a witch like Helen? I need her at the earliest convience.

Comment by Jezzi Belle Stewart on 02/18/03
Interesting story.  So she's going to transform him whether he wants it or not.  If he says, "No!" she will be violating his right as a U.S. Citizen to liberty and pursuit of happiness.  Will "she" remember being Ken?  If not, and he says "No!", she is, in effect, murdering him, thus depriving him of his right to life.  It would be interesting, and a good test of whether the alien is, in fact, a certain well known superhero, if Ken said "No!".  I can't imagine the defender of "Truth, Justice, and the American Way" allowing such a disregard of basic individual rights to occur.

Comment by Frilliette on 02/18/03
Quite clever, and certainly an innovative approach to origins. Generally, quite well written, although there are few overlong sentences and paragraphs. My biggest problem is with the anachronisms, which weren't really necessary to the story - a mobile phone and videos just after WW II?

Overall though, a fun story. I'll be back to see what happens next.

Frilliette



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