Good story but it would be improved if you could make arrangements (arraignments ??)for your work to be professionally edited before publication.

Once again, you've come up with some great ideas for fun and educational aicvitties for the kids. I specifically enjoyed your description of David at the National Museum.  I've seen it in person but it was nice to see him through your eyes.  At Lin's suggestion, the family headed down to the arts festival at Clarke Quay.  It was a great way to spend a leisurely hour.I have now added your site to my yahoo homepage.

The author writes:

>>"What's taking so long? What's taking so long! Do you have any idea what it takes to look as good as you MEN want us to look? You don't need to answer. Because you have no idea!"

Erm... *tap tap tap* 'Scuse me for interrupting... Women do that 1) because it feels good to feel feminine and to look one's best, 2) to survive the scrutiny of other women, 3) men come in a distant third, if at all. Now that we have THAT sorted...

Keep writing; you're great!

Teddie -- I love this story.  I hope there'll be more to it in the future.  You have a real flare for writing -- please don't stop.

Lauren

Very well written story. For me, possibly one of the best I've read online. Nice job Teddie.

In one word
GREAT

Great job Teddie!  I am very impressed by the sensitivity and emphasis on real love. Gently and tastefully told.  Your writing skills and style and comfortable and yet convincing.  I think you could show us more than tell us but all the same I thoroughly enjoyed your tale.

Hugs,

Kristi

I just completed the story and absolutely loved each part. I hope that you continue with this same story line -- makes me dream sweet though never to be dreams!  Love & Kisses
Carolyn Renee

I LOVE YOUR STORY.  

Briana had her ears pierced in part one.  Same double piercing happened in part 5!  Editing error??

Anyway like stories that are well written tel a story and don't jump to the operation after the first time of wearing a dress

simply love how part 9 ends.

I have read through part 8 and I find this to be a very nice story. I do hope that Briana will consider full transition with Jamie's full support and they can live as sister, friends and lovers. While lesbian love is not my cup of tea, I do so hope that Briana will consider being the woman she has become fully.

Barbara Lynn Terry

I enjoyed all episodes so far and look forward to next episode.  A nice gentle story without vulgarity or needless sexual excesses.  Not a prude but personally like to read about the softer more sensual aspcts of femininity as opposed to the more strident.  Keep writing.  I enjoy

Caroline

I just read Parts 1 & 2. They were fantastic and made me very jealous. Please continue.  Love & Kisses  Carolyn Renee

Part 8 among my favorite parts in the whole storyline

Another fine episode. But it does need some polishing.

Another good part to this very good continueing story.

Part 5 proves to be my favorite of the mini series so far. Keep up the excellent work dear.

Part 3 just proves this storyline just keeps getting better with each addition.

Oops.  Sorry about that.  I missed the change from Cathy to Carol, and back, when I proofed the story.  Just checked Part 3 and were back to Cathy.

A good continuation to the story.

BUT just what was Carl's fem name??? You used Cathy up to a point and then switched to Carol. It distracts from the story.

Just a comment on Barbara's comment.  I work at a school and many of the women teachers wear red and other bright nail colors, often with designs on them.  There's actually somewhat of a competition.  Our secretary, looking at my nails in a pic - I had on the French manicured nails with the white tips - said, "You look so nice, but your nails are so plain and they don't match your outfit or makeup."  and she was an Avon (sorry about the dirty word there Barbara :-) rep.  She was wearing shimmering gold polish that matched her outfit.  If I'd met my female colleagues while out and about, I would have been outed by my plain nails!

As far as the story, I stand by my original comments and am enjoying it.

well very well written parts

This is a very good start...however, as a Mary Kay Independent Beauty Consultant, I must tell you that red nails are a no no...while there are women (and men) who use red nail polish, the trend today is for the more natural look...cosmetics that blend in and make the woman (or man) look more natural...during my facials I impress on the customers that they don't need to MAKE a look, but enhance the look they already have...I sell more natural cosmetics in this manner...however, I realize this is only fantasy...but anyone wanting to look like a REAL woman, will go for the natural look...any woman wanting to feminize her husband, fiance or boyfriend
will go for the natural look if she wants it to appear that he is a REAL woman...in fact, red has been a no no for quite some time...it is usually seen by women who are on the worst dressed list...Waiting for the next installment

Barbara Lynn Terry

Bravo! I loved the story and look forward to the next part.

Oh, linzi, I had the very same suspicion about that solvent!  In
T* stories, solvents that work & are readily available are about
as rare as vitamin pills that really are vitamin pills!  :-)
But yes, I'm loving this story. It's just on the edge, pushing a
guy who's already a little femme much farther than he's prepared
to go. Not coercion, but pushing the well-known envelope. This is
always appealing to me, but it has to be done in a loving way, as
here.  I join Jezzi, Joanna, & Axanar in waiting eagerly for the
next installment. That lucky guy...!
.
Pervy

nice story bet the solvent doesnt work  :)

<<   I won't bother you with all the details,...  >>

Why not?  That's what many of us enjoy  :-)  

This is a great fantasy!  Just two things:  I think it might have been more exciting if Brian hadn't already been a TG, not him being punished or anything forced femme, but just him going from extreme nervousness and reluctance to finding out how great the femme side is for the very first time.  And I wish he'd had long hair, so there could have been a curler/perm scene.  With the high tech breasts and vagina, I expected at least extensions; just a normal wig worn in a normal way was kind of a come down.  

But this is just nit picking; I really am enjoying the story and look forward to part 2.

The very type of story I come by here for, I hope another installment is ready soon, Thank you

This is a tremendous start.  Don't be too long in giving us more!