Pretty good story so far, hope to read the final instalments sometime.

Thanks for sharing. What a pelsaure to read!

I like it and to see more.

Such an intriguing tale, I can imagine all kinds of things emeging from it, but what happened?  You get fed up. or did you two fall out, or what?  One of you should finish this please, it is just too good to leave it in the air like that.

Briar

Good story with a strange plot.  So, when will you finish this story? There are so many unfinished stories on storysite.

                        Vivien

I have enjoyed it so far. Why don't you finish the story?

Very much like your series.

Constructive criticism: You have so many POV's involved in a short chpater that is is a little difficult - though this could be because the reading is not all at once and I forget - sigh!

Your novel will be stronger if you can sell the reader on a primary protagonist and make them care about what happens to him/her.

Sure hope you keep on writing because the story shows excellent promise. Keep the air of mystery. Don't tell the reader everything.

Count me a fan and thanks for writing the story.

Yes, my question exactly...what the devil are hugglebugs? This is a very good story...now we need to have part 4, so we can find out what hugglebugs are...LOL...seriously, I can't wait for the next chapter.

Barbara Lynn Terry

Hi Rachel/Kim

Liked the story so far ... and will be keeping tabs on the site for more parts. So far (end of part two) I presume we're looking at some kind of gender-reversal cloning? Be interesting to see if I'm right.

If I'm right, the easiest way would be to strip out the Y chromosome, and duplicate the X chromosome, but it would probably be genetically dodge - all recessives would come to the front which could give you major physical appearance changes including eye and hair colour.

Keep up the good work - I'm watching with interest1

Mark