I didn't like it!
Nothing forced is good or fair!
Bad story Barbie.
Silvia.

Arrrg..., Pu-le-se For us who are in the south (Okla, Texas) we do NOT add the "Falls" to Wichita Falls, Texas. Only those who are not from this part of the world want to say the whole name. NO, the story is not Wichita, Kansas. Colloquialism (how we county people speak)runs through my stories.

For all those who leave comments, many thanks. It takes months to write a story. Your critique is appreciated.

All in all, an enjoyable read. I like sci-fi stories.

Aside from the grammatical errors and the geographical mistake mentioned by the other posters, there was one glaring error which I, as a former fan of auto racing in most of its forms (I lost interest after Dale Earnhardt was killed at Daytona in February 2001), spotted immediately:

Specifically, the line about "...[t]welve seconds to two hundred and forty miles an hour..." .  Nitromethane-burning dragsters (BTW: they haven't been called "rail dragsters" in YEARS) broke the FIVE-SECOND barrier several years ago (Eddie Hill, with a 4.99 Elapsed Time (E.T.)). The current records are currently held by Kenny Bernstein-- a Lowest E.T. record of 4.477 seconds (Route 66 Raceway, Joliet, Illinois,  June, 2001), and a Top Speed record of 332.18 MPH (Maple Grove Raceway, Reading, Pennsylvania, October 1, 2001). (This information was obtained from Kenny Bernstein's official Website, http://www.kennybernstein.com/)

No criticism is intended. :) I just thought that the author might be able to use a little more, shall we say, up-to-date information should she ever decide to re-release an "improved version" of this story.

Loved it!  Or most of it.   The end was a bit disappointing though.  Given all that talent, why would he/she stil want to be a dumb law man? Otherwise though, I thought it was very clever.

On second thoughts though, you are probably right about him wanting to revert back to his old job.  It is just that i will never understand humans....

Interesting story; a somewhat different concept. That's the good part. Wichita is in Kansas, not Texas, and being north of Wichita would place you still in Kansas. Also, there were some spelling errors and grammar mistakes that should be caught by proofreading before you submit your story. These mistakes lessen the readability of what could be a good effort.