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A Whole New You
by Paul G Jutras

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Comment by Silvia. on 03/18/10
Hi Paula.
You wrote a good story, and I liked.
Please, keep writing just like this!
Kisses.
Silvia.
Comment by Loriefran on 06/27/06
HI, I like the idea, but it really does need to be filled in more.  I was wondering if I could do some work on it and let you see it before it is given to Crystal under both of our names for posting?  Just asking, I won't do anything without your permission.

Lorie
Comment by Dillon Doe on 06/24/06
It does need a little bit of proof reading and checking..

Plus it needs alot of flushing out.. like possibly some of the turmoil for Robert etc at school so that you can gain an empathy for her.

a good outline for a story.. but i wouldnt call it a story.
Comment by Early June on 12/23/05
 Hey Paula!.  Thank you for your latest story.  You have generated a wonderful story of a loving family. Poor Robert.  He has no idea of what is going on around him.  Can his brother be so smart and Robert be so unaware?  And the mother?  She knew more about how the suit operated than Robert and she wasn't going to be wearing it.  I hope part 2 tells us more of their background and why the mother is so accepting of her son's idiosyncracies.

Comment by a guy on 12/16/05
quick.  brother brings magic suit to younger brother to appear a COMPLETE woman.  they put it on, and ..... STORY ENDS.  
don't blink, you might miss it!

btw, there is no lead in to explain anything, or to let you know his feelings - just that younger bro used to dress up.

it is too short.


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