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Wimp
by Vickie Tern

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Comment by georgia on 12/19/08
quick read - make it longer

Comment by Diane M on 05/29/08
Short and sweet; add more detail next time.

Comment by MKAT on 10/17/04
This sounds a bit like the Yvette Mineux movie of about 20 years ago, Mystique, about brainwashing in a cosmetics company. The movie was based on the Canadian Holiday Magic line.
The story could be longer and you could go into a lot more detail both about Jamie's transformation and about those weekend workshops. You could get some ideas from Mystique if you rent it, if you haven't already of course.

Comment by Darlene T. on 10/14/04
WELLLLL! Really Vickie it wasn't a story that could be rated G. It was good but I kept feeling, with this one and with Unfaithful Wife, you are wasting your talent Give us more like The Birthday Present, or Mmmmmm.
Those are great stories from a great talent. Woman you've got it, flaunt it.

Comment by Early June on 07/24/04
Nice tale Vicki.  I liked the twists you worked into the plot, as only a skilled master of tale telling could manage.  I especially liked the ending.  No wonder she's a rising star. She could give lessons to Machievelli. Thank you for sharing.



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