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Comment by cheap oem software on 02/11/12
7z6eUA It's pleasant sitting at work to distract from it�to relax and read the information written here:DD Comment by Aleesha on 09/17/10 I enjoyed this story very much, just a pity it was John and not me. Thanks. Comment by Cassandra on 09/20/03 Jennifer: Comment by A Sudden Fan on 09/18/03 This story was fun and enoyable to read. The characterizations were top notch. Not to many stories I mark as keepers, like this one This one is new, different and refreashing. Comment by Kimmie on 09/18/03 I have read both of your stories and really enjoyed them.You do have a nice writing style and a creative mind.I do however see a choppiness in your writing particularly this second one that seems to make particularly this second one not as free flowing as it could be at the beginning.All the ideas are there and its good ,but does leave the impression of more phrase like sentences I think.It is isn't to degree to lose the train of thought but could be more free flowing I think.Now the center of the story seems fine ,however the end does go back to alittle choppy. |
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