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The most problematic thing with this story was the flow.

The constant .. She said, Joan said, Phil said. Bob Said etc etc are unnecessary.. Gramatically when a new person speaks you start on a new line. If that person has not spoken before then you use their name alow with Said or similar. try looking in a thesaurus for the word said. . and think about other ways you can describe the way someone is speaking other than just using the word said.

anyways Enough Said (pun intended)

The numerous language mistakes in this story make it difficult to read.  Odd thing is, this is one of my favorite kind of stories, but, to echo the comments left on another story by the same author, the TG element seems to be lacking.  It would be like rewriting a classic story and replacing the male names with female names and vice versa, but leaving the rest intact.  What stories like these need is a gimmick: something that separates the role-reversed world from our own in some way that makes it a more interesting place to read about.  

A possible gimmick might be that the men are dominated even more than women are, possibly in very peculiar/sexual ways.  Just a thought.