What a load of tosh! So much stupidity in the first few pages which includes a seven year old 'girl' with (quote) 'small but alluring breasts.' (unquote) What planet are you on? I understand and realise that these stories are fantasy but please, try keeping some reality about them.

Patricia I'm sorry, but this is not really a good story.

Fantastic start - have you "been there?"

This was one X-rated story I didn't mind reading, because it seemed like you had a point rather than simply talking about sex because it was cool to do so, selling-out your characters.

If your point however is partially the abuse done to crossdressers who are exploring being transgender you ought to elaborate on the relationship between Susan and Patrick. Why did they break up? what were there fundamental differences? Why wasn't Susan a good ally for Patrick?

One writing teacher once told me that you have to know your characters well enough to "take your characters to dinner" and ask them questions and know what they would answer.

Hope this helps. I really enjoy your meaningful and thoughtful style.

--Sam

Beautiful story Patti! The love and support of our heroine's family and friends are a little girl's dream!!! And Tom?  What a dreamboat!

I am a new authoress myself, and know how difficult writing such a story can be!  I applaud you for your efforts!

Kisses and Hugs!

Sissy Prissy